Mr Critic Corner

hii would you mind reading the first chapter of my book and leave an honest critic? 

Hello. I would really appreciate it if you would critic my book Marked as soon as possible. Please try to help me, I am trying to improve my writing as much as possible. Thank you.

Look i want you to critque my book Bigfoot Season please

can you read my book and review it ? its really short https://www.wattpad.com/story/77056396-from-me-to-you

Could you please look at my stories? I would love some feedback, and I want to publish them as real novels someday, but I would really appreciate someone else's opinion first. Thank you! ❤️

Could you check any of my fanfictions?
          A new generation of vampires (TVD and TO fanfic) is my main one, but also have Inhuman (marvel fanfic) and The huntress' secret (a star wars fanfic)
          Thanks!

Can you please look at my story, Universal Problems please? Thank you!

I'd like a little critic on my first chapter that will be published today.
          Book: never trust my past
          Genre: adventure, action
          Writer: roe1825 (me!)
          Thank you in advance!!

Can u pls take ur valuable time and go thru my story bridging the gap?

Do you think you can spare some time to read my story entitled 'The Lonely Traveller'? I would love to hear some constructive criticisms to write better.