H3artString
Okay so just so you know I don't mean this to be offensive. Okay so first, his name is spelt Kirishima. Second I think it would help if you put quotations when the characters speak. Like this ''I don't wanna hear your sob story.'' it helps when you can see when the Characters speak so it doesn't confuse the readers. Hope this helps and btw it was a good story just needs a little help.
