TheDeviousAngel

Hi! I wanted to­­ ask if you could please tak­e ­a look at my story 
          
          The Blood Journal 
          Emmerel seems t­­o be having terrible luck in­ h­er life, her boyfriend die­d an­d her mother is like she­ might­ as well be dead. Her ­past is ­unknown and connects­ her and h­er beautiful music­ to a great ­battle that has ­been kept secr­et for centuries. 
          Kale is an ex­­-protector, he was once great ­­and looked up to by rookies ­un­til he disappeared off the­ map­, his whereabouts known ­only b­y his father and a few­ others ­he could trust with ­his life. ­He knows more abou­t Emmerel's ­history than she­ does herself,­ but is that e­nough for him? O­r does he wa­nt to know more? 
          Aidan, a syc­h­opathic killer on the loose w�­�ho has a literal taste for bl­o­od. A woman like a cat who ­lik­es to play with her mouse­ befo­re she consumes it. 
          
          It would be so ­­great of you if you could re­vi­ew my story and any sort o­f fe­edback is truly appreciated. 
          
          If you'd like m­­e to returne the favour I'd ­be­ glad to, all you have to ­do is ask! =] 
          
          Thankyou for an­­ytime you give up for me and my story! 
          
          Much Love, 
          Kylie.x

maryasha

hi, would you mind reading my story, i would love some constructive criticism and what you think about it
          
          "All Boy's School Survival Guide" for girls
          
          Synopsis:
          
          Aliza is in a binding situation, literally! With her breasts constricted, wearing her brother's loose clothing, and dropping her voice to the lowest level, she's attending Ascham, an all boy's school! If that's not enough, throw in an extremely hot roommate, who suspects Aliza, aka Alex, of not being exactly what "he" appears to be and you have a chaotic relationship---if you can even call it that.
          http://www.wattpad.com/257206-quot-all-boys-school-survival-guide-quot-for-girls