Danni_Black

@MarionWatkins you aren't very descriptive sadly it lacks sensory details. I'm not saying described every little thing. rather spend a little extra time describing the big things.

MarionAvalon

Do you have an example?
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Danni_Black

@MarionWatkins yes I am absolutely in love with Megan, and I'm really glad you have Harry in there also. I love the way you are incorperating Cedric in the story, but I am worried about The Goblet of Fire. I think ill need a few boxes of tissues when he dies. I also wonder this would impact Megan. I love your writing style, although I would love it if you added a bit more details. Great book, keep up the fantastic work!

MarionAvalon

For the Goblet of Fire, you'll have to wait and see but yes, I think tissues will be handy lol! As for the détails, how do you mean exactly? I can work on that but need a little more specifics
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