@prateeikk ...i read the first chapter. It was pretty cool. I think you should re-check it before publishing it. In a paragraph, you wrote 'yelped' and then in the next line you wrote ' she yelled even louder'. It doesn't make any sense. ' even louder' can make the readers think that you accidently typed yelled instead of yelped. And you did not mention what she yelled. There are minor mistakes. Although it was interesting, the minor mistakes seem to suck out the interest out of it. The way you started it, was amazing and attractive....Regards, Mary Queen