@xxxfabgurlxxx I said that you should edit. Nothing more. Plus, what you're asking of me isn't right. I need to be impressed before I become someone's fan. It's like cheating, having deals like this, so please think before you post anything...
It's true what I said anyway. You should edit. You're story was great, you're plot was the usual but with a different touch..don't change anything, just improve..that's all. :)