David Lonimi

Hey, I was hoping if you could read my book 'Memories of Crimson' (link below) and offer some helpful feedback! I'm okay recieving harsh feedback, so just point out anything you think needs changing.
          
          I'd deeply appreciate the help ^-^
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/376928147-memories-of-crimson-revali-x-reader

Reading request.
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/378500918?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=diya_wrts

hi there I was kindly asking if you could read my book 'The Power Concept' I would appreciate it if you could also leave a review and give me feedback on the story progression from chapters 1 -12. PLEASE I want to get better at writing