I am willing to beta read and/or proofread for you. Don't be afraid to ask. I try not to give unsolicited concrit but sometimes I can't hold my tongue.... fingers...? 🤷‍♀️
💜💜💜Borahae 💜💜💜 Let's be awesome together.

Otherwise: I don't care what dictionary.com says: LOWLY does not equal QUIETLY and almost never fits where it's jammed. 😑
told < said. Told used in place of said requires a pronoun afterwards. Said is perfectly fine on its own.
And, ffs, exam level vocabulary is useless if spelling and grammar throughout are 💩