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@iamcutester yung bang instead na conversational yung isang scene, gagawing narrative yung style? ang purpose eh lunurin yung reader sa pagiimagine nung eksena, pero shooting some conversations in between para hindi antukin yung reader. suggestion lang yon, depende parin yun sa kung pano mo gustong iinhale ng reader yung eksena mo :)

@iamcutester thanks! this was a wrong start actually. need to redraft the storyline, once fixed, dun ko iaupdate. i've read yours (NBNP), very easy to digest para sa reader, good point yon. tingin ko lang 1. too wide line breaks (unless it's intentional?) 2. check your tense if past ba o present, dapat consistent and 3. sometimes you need to insert "thought" scenes in lieu of character lines siguro? para balanse yung conversation part at yung imagination part. yown lang so far. congrats, me fan-base kana pala :)