Despair_Sadge
I haven’t even started the REWRITE and I have to finish this book before June ends…
Despair_Sadge
KazBrekker_V4
@Despair_Sadge Hey there, partner! Hope you're doing good! So, while writting my story, I got an idea for a maybe better way for Starved!Y/N (Yes, I'm labeling them like undertale aus now) to snap. Here's my draft: Demon: (points to Andrew) I'll assume you meant HIM. Andrew: Wh-What? Ashley: (Protectively in front of Andrew) No way, back off! Demon: If u wont give your dear brother, then I'll just have to settle for the significant other instead... (It says, as it's eyes turn to Y/n, who simply tales a step back) Y/n: Hold on, now... Demon: Choose... Tar Soul... (Ashley hesitates. She looks at Y/n with an apologetic look before turning back towards the demon) Y/n's mind: Is she... Really going to? After all I've done for her, for US? Is this... Even worth it even more? She's just gonna choose Andrew every damn time... No matter how hard I try. She didn't even try to get in front me, to protect me. Or try to defend me... Maybe- (His thoughts are cut as officers rub towards them) Ashley: Them! Take them! Demon: Very well... I offer to summon you to my realm for the extra souls. Ashley: Deal! (The trio is then translated to the between, or whatever it's called.) Andrew: Y/N, what the hell, man! You were supposed to lure the little sucker, not turn him into minced meat! Y/n: Wh- Hey! Why is everything always my fault!? He saw us kill his parents, the damage was already done, I just cleaned up. Andrew: And you almost got our souls sucked out by a demon! Y/n: What 'us'? She wasn't gonna pick you... I saw you both... Andrew: What are you talking about? Ashley: Hey now, you're both just a little tense. Maybe- Y/N: Shut it! I saw the look in your eyes... You were gonna give me up, weren't you? Ashley: What?! Y/n, I would never- Y/n: cut the crap, Ash! Be honest with me... Who were you gonna choose? Me, or your dear Andy? Ashley: I... Ugh, Y/n what the hell are you talking about!? Y/N: Answer the question!
KazBrekker_V4
Continuation:
Ashley: Ugh, Y/n, now's not the time! We sacrificed those officers, can't we just move on?
Y/n: Ashley... Would you have picked me over Andrew?
Ashley: . . .
Y/N: Would you!?
(Ashley looks away, an unsure expression on her face. Y/n's heart breaks a little. He feels angry. His hand grips the cleaver, he wants to kille her, have her feel a fraction of the pain he's feeling.)
(Y/n yells as he charges at Ashley, raising the blade up, Ashley flinches and freezes up, Andrew's quicker and rushes at her, pushing her out the way of the swing as Y/N just barely misses.)
(Y/n snaps back for a moment. Oh God, what is he doing!? It's... It's the obsession he can't let it win... But then he looks at Andrew and Ashley's position, and he can't help but get mad again.)
(Y/n looks at them on the ground, eyes wide and feral. He looks at her, and then at HIM. Why is he so special? Why does he get special treatment? What does he have that I don't? She always clings to him... She always tries to save HIM. What if...)
(Y/n starts to feel his obsession creeping up again. He wants to surpress it, but...)
(Y/n starts laughing like a deranged psychopath as he points the cleaver to them both.)
Y/N: It's him, isn't?
Ashley: Wha-
Y/n: Andrew. If I take him out of the picture, then you'll give me all your undivided love, right? I'll finally be all that matters, right?
Ashley: Y/n... This isn't you...
Y/n: No, Ash. This IS me. It's always been me. No more hiding it... I'll Kill Him, and then I'll be the two of us, forever!
(Ashley's eyes widen, realizing the vision is coming true. Andrew realizes a second later, and they both take a step back as the chase begins.)
The end.
Wow, I'm realizing I'm much worse at this than I thought... Oh well, I tried.
I hope I served some purpose here. See you later, partner! Remember, stay determined!
KazBrekker_V4
@Despair_Sadge Hey there, partner! How're things going for you? Good, I hope. I've been trying to comment my suggestions, character analysis, and critiques under the comments of MM,SM,LM (Mock Me, Starve Me, Love Me), but, Wattpad's being a petty b word and won't let me send it. And this is the third time I've tried. So, I'm probably just gonna wait for the next chapter now. Anyways, enough of me complaining. I got stuff I need to do and read. I hope to see you soon, partner!
KazBrekker_V4
Good luck, partner. If you liked my draft, feel free to copy and paste some stuff. Granted, if you have a laptop or a pc.
Anyways, happy writting!
Despair_Sadge
@KazBrekker_V4 this might be peak fiction, now I just you know… actually have to start writing *sigh*
Despair_Sadge
Okay, family stuff is out of my control, so no chapter again today, but I’ll lock in tomorrow to give a double upload
Despair_Sadge
Don’t even worry about the fact that I haven’t uploaded, don’t worry it hasn’t been a full 2 days yet, so my daily upload is still a thing! I’ll post before it becomes a full 2 days which should be before 9pm later today.
I got cooked by my family for making me be socially active…
Despair_Sadge
Mock me, Starve me, Love me!!! IS SO BACK! Yup I know guys only love me for that one story, I mean why else would that be my only successful story! But it’s okay, I don’t mind….
I hope you guys enjoy the newest chapter I’ll go back to the back to back schedule I had when I was first uploading that book, I’ll finish it and then hopefully I can be free from the one trick wonder curse.
I have no idea why I’m posting this, since you guys will not be reading this announcement, oh well…
If you are reading, make sure to comment and give me hate on the chapter or here! I don’t mind! Just make sure you bully me off the app!
Bye Bye!
Despair_Sadge
@Dytime yeah! I’m thinking of doing it after I finish all of episode 3 decay and it’s different endings, to be honest I’m delaying it cause I’m still thinking on how to format splits in Wattpad, like where do I put the split in the book chapters. Long ass response, by the way…
Despair_Sadge
Depression is real, so I need to lock in… Tcoaal chapter coming out today, okay? I realized i need to set a requirement or goal to start doing it… don’t worry i got this I’m not new to this, I’ve played these games before!! Just like how i make plans in my personal life to assure I’ll be in the future, i will make plans to write and actually do it, cause if i can’t commit to something as simple as writing either it be bad or good… I don’t I’ll be able to commit to any plans in my future
BrianGeller
...is author and account dead...):?
Despair_Sadge
@BrianGeller Don’t worry, I’m not dead yet, I’ll at least finish the the Tccoal story before I end up dead. To be honest, I might be going back to that story after this weekend or during, just depends
Despair_Sadge
Bro I just realized my TCOAAL series was my peak in terms of consistency… like I was on a World Series record with my consistency, I even uploaded when my wisdom tooth was removed…
I’m washed
Despair_Sadge
@BrianGeller you wanna know something? I’ve haven’t been reading anything lately… I don’t know I just haven’t felt the motivation to read or write anything… god I sound I’m depressed, but I’m not don’t worry depression isn’t real *thumbs up* So sorry can’t answer that…
Despair_Sadge
@BrianGeller define that questions… is it like recommending things I’ve read, or like ideas to write?
BrianGeller
So deltarune, I don't even know if you like or dislike the game but the one thing I appreciate is after playing both chapters the story is far more mature and dark and mature with snowgrave there are things I did not think Toby would ever put in his game and he did...I love mature and dark storytelling.
Despair_Sadge
@BrianGeller I haven’t seen deltarune past chapter 1, but I liked it, I just haven’t had time to play it. I’ve been getting spoiled on my TikTok feed and from what I’ve seen the new chapters look really good! If I do a deltarune story it’ll be after an undertale, since it’s the og.