@jiawen_fjw
No I'm happy to help for free. I just checked out the first chapter of your book and it seems unique and yet still beautiful. Do you want me to critique every chapter or just have a big one at the end of the story? I hope you'll be happy with my non-existent critiquing skills.
Beware! There are a ton of spammers out there to get you as of recently. Signs of them are weird letters (alphabet), free gift cards, apple products, and accounts made only hours ago. Don't click on the link, as it contains malware. I got two of them in one day! What is the world coming to?