I have done a rewrite of the last paragraph of page 4 and first paragraph of page 5 with more to come this rewrite based on a comment so add comments yours could play a part
Chapter 1 is coming to an end what should I call it and do you think chapter 1 should be one part or do you like the pages please let me know in the comments.
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