@Leyya_Len hi! I added your story in my reading list, so expect that i am looking forward for future updates so far, ok naman siya, except sa ilang errors sa language. But it doesnt really matter, for now. You can just continue with what you are writing right now. You can just edit it soon, as language and structure is also one of the factors that can attract more readers.
I hope you are not offended with my comment, i am just being honest. So i hope u take it as an advice instead. Nasanay lang din kasi ako magcritic ng literary works.
