@BackFromHell I read your story. It's very good, although it seems like a little extreme what the child does at the end. You explain that this has gone on for such a long time, but the reader doesn't really get a good feel for it. Other than that, there are only two problems. Number one is the bullies. There are bullies who cause kids to commit suicide and then laugh at them even afterwards. Considering how you're placing these kids out to be, I'd say that they'd be more likely to encourage him to jump. Second, how did they get on the roof? At my school and many others, it's not so easy, they really don't make the entrances easy to find, and they'd usually be locked. These aren't big problems, just little quirky things I found about it. However, over all it's very good. I can't wait to see the rest. :)
