Darktaku

Hi, me again! You probably don't recognize me on account of the new...well, account. But a couple weeks back you and I had an R4R arrangement, with my story being a Sonic the Hedgehog fanfic. I thought things were going quite well, until you put a comment on MY story saying I read through your last chapter too fast and didn't engage properly. Still curious what your source is for how fast someone can read a, what was it, 3k word chapter? I feel like the more mature response would have been to reach out in private, you had my reddit account, but no matter. In any event, I'm back, I will be uploading my stories again with some much needed improvements, and I'd be happy to pick things back up with a proper and more detailed arrangement, because your story about Virgil certainly was more engagement than the usual dark romance I see here. Toodles!

Dyurne

@Wowoah I know. That is why I kept it and blocked him so he cannot delete the messages.
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Wowoah

This is a really funny thread lol
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Darktaku

@Darktaku Okay, I'll admit I was being a petty bitch to get on your nerves these last couple messages but I'm gonna drop that mask here and be genuine. That's what caused all this? The speed reading and the comment? Dude, that really does sound like something you and I have could have discussed and talked about. I'll admit I escalated things unnecessarily and I'll apologize for that right now, I'm sorry, but if you had just asked me about the comment I would have corrected it. I was kinda high when I read that last chapter and I couldn't really think of anything to say. I'll apologize for that too, I'm sorry. But when someone comes at me in a public place saying I scammed them, I'm gonna get a little heated. Again, I'm sorry I gave you the wrong impression and that I escalated everything, but I do feel like you could have just come to me and we could have avoided a lot of mutual irritation
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JackieFoxWrites

I have a question for you or maybe a little bit of a collaboration on a chapter. 
          I noticed there is dwarven lore within your book. I want to bring in a certain dwarven element to a culture, but I'm kind of ignorant on how I would do that other than very surface level, Lord of the rings type things which are probably very stereotypical and overplayed at this point. 
          
          Here's the thought, outside of the orbit of the Galilean moons around Jupiter, there's a moon called Themisto, it's millions of kilometers in either direction from its nearest neighbors and its nearest neighbors are the moons you would most want to colonize on one side and on the other side the only moons in the system that have mineable ore. 
          
          So the Jovian people would like to turn the moon into a large false moon complex that is both foundry and shipyard. 
          
          I have already started them on this project and I've advanced time for 5 years to allow them to make their way to an almost completed space station type situation, but also to allow a little bit of a mining culture to develop. 
          
          Also, I imagine for logistical reasons that these are very likely geomancers. 
          
          They may also potentially be a cast of Angel known as Kerub (they're about 3 to 4 ft tall and have four wings distributed across their body, they're very good at dispersing heat and hovering like a hummingbird, but they're also typically able to discharge a large amount of chi at one time and have a tendency towards being better geomancers or serving on ships as a sort of additional capacitor system).

JackieFoxWrites

@JackieFoxWrites Yeah you see what you mean as it seems like one of the key components is being non-magical. 
            
            But I feel like even the basic lore could be made interesting within this framework, maybe even as a contrast. 
            
            So let's say that we have minors who aren't physically as adapted for geomancy as the Kerub, but they have become diligent workers and they have developed a culture that is proud of the fact that they don't need magic to shape steel.
            
            Angelic geomancers tend to create things that feel like they're grown very organic because they're subtly reshaping the metal with intention.
            
            It would probably look very different than hand-shaped metal and that might give our dwarven parallel characters an opportunity to excel in a different way that is more physically taxing perhaps leading to stronger bodies but also allows them to compete with magic users
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Dyurne

@JackieFoxWrites Truth is, mine are pretty standard fantasy dwarves (just no internal mana, but they build magical things). They probably won’t map super well onto your Kerub angel miners on Themisto. But your concept with the isolated moon, geomancy, and four-winged heat-dispersing angels sounds dope on its own. Maybe lean into the angel side more than trying to force a dwarven feel?
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_Rainy_Days

Hey! I just wanted to thank you again! Your tips were truly great, and I was able to implement many of them right away. So really, thank you again! I’m very happy that you read my story and helped me improve.

_Rainy_Days

Absolutely not! I love exactly this kind of feedback — it’s something I can truly work with. Of course you’re happy about every comment because you just want your story to be read, but something this useful and honest is simply wonderful. I kept improving things throughout the day. The lines you commented on were incredibly helpful. I noticed it immediately and was able to change so many things right away. So hate you? Never! :D I LOVE YOU for that.
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Dyurne

@_Rainy_Days ye dw. I try to help and hope people won't hate me after =)
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authorGabby

Hii V4V?

authorGabby

@Dyurne done voting for your story! Thank you for voting too <3
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authorGabby

@Dyurne all good!
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Dyurne

@authorGabby sure. going to bed now, once I wake up.
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