Hey Flower, just wanted to let you know that I checked your story, and I have the feedback that you asked for. 1: Punctuation, some of it is a little confusing and it's always good to give a good spell check. 2: Character details, I have no idea what any of the characters look like exactly. If you could explain how they look more, it make the story more vivid and emersive. 3: Setting: don't just tell me where their at, let me know what the hospital looks like, smells like, feels like. Is it sunny outside or cloudy? That's all I have for now, continue and I'll write back.
