Heya emo, I see you've started on your stories and I genuinely enjoy the plot but, I was thinking of maybe giving u some tips? Not to say that I'm good or anything but in a readers perspective.
Correct me if I'm wrong, but, I think it is a romance fanfic between Megumi and Kaiori, your oc right?
Most of the time, I'm looking for something light hearted that has something bad looming on.
Your work does have the part of having some interesting things nailed down but, you could also add some funny light hearted moments.
I think many readers enjoy that!
Anywho, I am really sorry if I appeared violent or mean, I just wanted to share my thoughts with you.
But that's just me speaking, you can continue to write in your own way, I just wanted to tell you my thoughts about it.
Hope you have a good day
