hi bby.
so for a first attempt, it's really good :-))
i'd say that u could work on the grammar and punctuation, stuff like that. and maybe do some research on depression and things related. statistics and stuff couldnt hurt, u know? i mean, ik that a lot of writers on wattpad do research before they start a story ((including myself)), so it would deffo make u seem more professional :-))
ily x