InnocentGurley
Hi [Erato_Akishima],
Sorry to interrupt - I hope you're doing well! I'm a 15-year-old writer currently working on my first story series on Wattpad under the username @innocentgurley.
I really admire your work and I was wondering if you might have a few minutes to check out my story. It's something I've poured my thoughts and creativity into - and I'd love a genuine feedback from someone experienced.
If you enjoy it, a simple vote or comment would truly mean a lot to me. I'm happy to check out your stories too - we could do a little vote-for-vote if you're open to it!
The story is called [The Stalker's Game], and it's a mix of suspense, emotional twists, obsession, and secrets hiding in plain sight.
Here's the link: [https://www.wattpad.com/story/397333373?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link& utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=InnocentGurley]
Thank you so much for your time - and for continuing to inspire young writers like me.
Warmly,
innocentgurley
Erato_Akishima
@InnocentGurley I understand, here's my feedback to your story I just finish chapter 1, and I see potential on your work as the writer of Caught in a Cabin, I’d say your story draft already carries strong emotional weight. The scene of a mother disowning her daughter hits hard it’s raw, shocking, and leaves the reader feeling that same sense of betrayal and disbelief as the character. It’s a powerful, heartbreaking setup. The trauma of being pushed away by someone who should protect you makes the story instantly gripping. I’d suggest tightening the dialogue a little so the emotions feel sharper, but the core idea betrayal, confusion, and forced independence works very well. keep up the good work
InnocentGurley
@Erato_Akishima Thanks for your love and support And Sorry for the late reply As a student it is a bit difficult for me to keep updating my story and reply to messages So I'm really sorry for a late reply Hope you like my story♡♡♡.