Things I need to work on:
• Little talk between characters. 
• Consistency 
• Explaining things. 
*SotR is currently under revision* I write books, and play League. My main book series is called Shadow of the Raptor, though it has little to no involvement with those prehistoric pack animals. They may not be the best written books, especially not book one, but I believe that if you can view the overall story and enjoy it, then it's worth the pain. But if you don't like the overall story, I understand, we all have our own opinions. So feel free to criticize me as needed. If anything, the criticism will only help me further my writing and storytelling capabilities.