Ethan-Acedia
@Paper_story_pleas You do you mate. My only advice is to take it slow and steady rush work is sloppy work after all.
Ethan-Acedia
@Paper_story_pleas It's good, as for my opinion the two only real gripe's is that it's a little hard to read at some parts. Because there's no pacing to some sentences so it's like the POV is constantly changing or merged together that it hard to understand. Second is the [...] it's cool if it as a situational thing but it being constant gets real old fast.
SmokeyCrow
Thanks for the follow! Which of my stories brought you to me.
gaming_makima_bean
Thx for the follow
Crazyone556
I'm would like to know if you have any comments on my story I'm planning on making it a lot bigger I'm just on mobile and did that in 30 minutes I'm planning on chapters about 10x as big and probably 40 chapters but would love feedback
Crazyone556
@AlexFolsom I definitely agree with you on of I was going to keep him quirkless and have him rely on pure skill and the whole reason for the adoption with the Yaoyorozu's specifically is that they could actually have the resources to arm him with monofilament wires and training as well as a friend that will act as support
Ethan-Acedia
@Crazyone556 if you're making deku into a wire user you have to be careful about his personality more importantly his confidence most why are users have some have a more degree of self confident nature to them and a lot of tactical planning and cunning of how they fight. My second feedback is don't add OFA personally I just think it's overdone Plus if he's going to be a quirkless hero you need to stay quirkless.
iwuvuhmkay12
Thank you for adding my book to your reading list!
