Ok I understand know looking at it for the first time I see the problems I think it is because I am a serouis girl and you seem more lade back and happy you should tack it back I fell it was better when you wrote it.Sorry if you did not like it bye.
Please read and tell me what you think about my story so far please I fell like I should end it in them next chapter because the only coment I got was some one saying that I should stop writing and never write agin it made me upset unofe to acksadintly over feed my fish they died
Tell your readers that I am continuing this story with all most no change exept a new cared to and more it well be called creepy children contenued and tell them my screen name