Exoticelf

@zebramooseeno2hater please don’t hate on someone’s writing and then have typos. Most people’s thoughts are scattered from past to present. How have the characters not had character development? If Harlow has had no development, she would not be  in a relationship or fall in love. When dealing with her alcoholism, it is  very normal to relapse. You would also think that the author is not  Shakespeare, this is WATTPAD, not a professional library. I will not be sucking my mother because I don’t do inbreeding unlike you

@Exoticelf ai is not the most literary correct it doesnt actually know how words are used in context it's not as advances ad a human
            as for it being in the present tense, THE TENSE IS NOT CONSISTENT
            furthermore, you can't have the same conflicts happening and fixing themselves witbout any sort of character development
            and the people aren't awkward it's the writing as in the use of vocabulary 
            lastly suck your mother

@zebramooseeno2hater So if it sounds ai, is ai not the most literary correct? Also, most of what happens is present, meaning no need for past or future text. The whole book is half based on their story, but also half on the conflict, the mafia is far too complex for the problem to be solved easily without stutter or something going wrong. There is many depictions of the atmosphere, if the problem is it not being how a person thinks, the average person does on recall every detail in their brain of the environment. Once again, if your problem is the story not being accurate enough for a first person narrative, people will act awkward and have awkward feelings, meaning the critique of it being “awkward” contradicts the other critique .