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You're the water to my fish, the cactus to my desert, the icing to my cake, the reader to my novel!  
          
          Why have a slice of cake when you could have a slice of life instead?;) 
           https://www.wattpad.com/story/377348659-Socially-Awkward 

I really liked how you have a visual representation of each character and their aesthetic. The book idea is good and I liked it. But I also see how you’re struggling with first person point of view, and same. It’s hard but try not to use ‘I’ in each sentence. I have around 500+ Pinterest wording advice on my board. You can use ‘I’ but only once or twice in each paragraph mostly or else it’ll be impulsive almost. It’s a struggle to write in 1st pov but other than that, I think the story is good.  
          
          If you need any ideas on what else you ca use instead of ‘I’, I’ll be happy to help.