Feible Nim

Yeah, that story has a really messy plot. Also, if it's okay to ask, what chapters did I mess up on? (Yes I'm talking about 'Within the Screen') My dumbass thought that it would be okay to write it back then when I didn't have much experience–
          
          I'm just trying to figure out ways to edit the chapters past me made just to help any future readers have a good time reading without any second-hand embarrassment ^^;
          
          Thank you in advance~!!