Working on a dark portal fantasy novel -- Redoubt: Killing Intent

I'm an aspiring writer, illustrator, 3D designer and animator. Currently looking for critique on my work in progress, as my book is pretty much where all the relatively useless knowledge in the back of my head can actually be useful.

My 20's have been interesting, so far. I've been on Roblox since 2009, and it's the worst game I have ever deeply enjoyed. I like to make stir-fry dishes with real butter, not margarine. My close friends are wonderfully awful people, and I love them to hell and back.

Maybe we can win this.