Garimapm

Thick walls
          	Inside that thick walled castle, stands a princess alone
          	Not wanting for a prince to come, 
          	Not waiting to be rescued.
          	Behind the closed windows and walls,
          	She is soothing her aches, she feels secured. 
          	I wish she knows inside the thick walls, alone she stands.
          	I wish she knew if someone sneaks in she stands no chance.
          	I wish she knew she remains defenceless inside the thick walls.
          	I wish she knew she’ll be at the mercy of the intruder if the walls crumbles and falls.
          	I wish she knew if penetrated, she can be easily manipulated inside the closed walls

coderedsam

I'm not a good critique to anyone and the intentional complement was so that things don't stop as of yet. I would rather read more of what your mind has to offer.
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Garimapm

@coderedsam for this u'll have to guide me... I'm rather naive in this context
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Garimapm

@coderedsam 
          	  Really!!! intentional complements will not take u anywhere with.  I would have appreciated if it was honest critique and not intentional.
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Garimapm

Thick walls
          Inside that thick walled castle, stands a princess alone
          Not wanting for a prince to come, 
          Not waiting to be rescued.
          Behind the closed windows and walls,
          She is soothing her aches, she feels secured. 
          I wish she knows inside the thick walls, alone she stands.
          I wish she knew if someone sneaks in she stands no chance.
          I wish she knew she remains defenceless inside the thick walls.
          I wish she knew she’ll be at the mercy of the intruder if the walls crumbles and falls.
          I wish she knew if penetrated, she can be easily manipulated inside the closed walls

coderedsam

I'm not a good critique to anyone and the intentional complement was so that things don't stop as of yet. I would rather read more of what your mind has to offer.
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Garimapm

@coderedsam for this u'll have to guide me... I'm rather naive in this context
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Garimapm

@coderedsam 
            Really!!! intentional complements will not take u anywhere with.  I would have appreciated if it was honest critique and not intentional.
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coderedsam

You still haven't posted it yet

Garimapm

@coderedsam you are one stubborn brat... (wanted to write braty kid, but that's not a word)... U'll make me search for the original one then....
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coderedsam

But I really want that one.it's like etching at the back of my mind.every other time when I think about it
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Garimapm

@coderedsam see not my best but i still wrote something seriously after about 6years.... so something i think i can show u... not the murderer one but for now... my first baby step... appreciate it
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