GeneralVortex06

Hello there, it’s been a hot minute huh?

Hey guys, I'm thinking of rewriting the White Mission from my Forbidden Huntresses fanfic. Mainly because I feel like this new idea will flow more smoothly for the story. Estimated finish for the change is optimisitcally tomorrow, maybe the day after.

My rewrite of the Knights of Ren: 
          They are a Dark side cult, but differentiate from the Sith in several key things: The members are genuinely loyal to each other, with Kylo Ren seeing the other members as a brotherhood. 
          They wish to change the Galaxy for their own twisted version of good. Removing the Jedi, Republic and the last of the Sith's legacy to create something new, believing this will help the Galaxy move on and prepare it from all dangers, both internal and those in the unknown region. 
          While they are against the Jedi and Sith, they do admire Revan for seemingly using the dark side of the force to protect the Galaxy from a bigger evil. 
          Kylo Ren still looks up to Vader, but more so because of the order Vader brought to the Galaxy rather than out of any approval of Sith ideology. 
          The Knights of Ren shown in my version of the Sequel Trilogy, including Kylo, were Jedi younglings kidnapped by the original leader of the Knights of Ren, who brought them up harshly but out of wanting to make them perfect warriors than promoting hatred and distrust between each other. In the end, Kylo Ren would see the old Knights of Ren leader as imperfect for leading the Order, and kills him. He also only works under Snoke to gain more power and knowledge, and his end goal was always to kill Snoke and take over the First Order to try and mold it to what he and his Knights want. 
          Anyways, that's my idea for them, to make them more interesting and to differentiate them from the Sith.

An dumb Idea for what happened with Salam in the Jedi Adam universe.
          
          *many, MANY years ago*
          
          Darth Traya: The hell happened? Why do you have his Ship?
          
          Darth Sion: Cheap Wizzard, no wonder people are always stabbing him in the back! 
          
          Traya: SION! Answer the Kriffing question!!
          
          Sion: I asked for a fair days pay after a fair days work. Then he, kind of got a little angry. So I admit, I kind of got a little angry.
          
          Traya: Did you kill him?
          
          Sion: WHAT KIND OF ANIMAL DO YOU TAKE ME FOR?! NO I DID’T KILL HIM!
          
          Traya: Oh kriff.
          
          Sion: *Pulling a gagged and bound Salam from the ship* BUT I DID KIDNAP HIS WIFE!
          
          Traya: OH NO!
          
          Darth Nihlus: Soooo… you want me to do my thing and clean this up?
          
          Traya: Dose it look like we have a choice?

Hey yo. Saw the new fic you posted, loved every second of it! 
          Been trying to work on my Jedi Adam fic. Also trying to pick up where I left off on CSR. 
          
          I’ve also been think about re-structuring the whole thing to be a series instead of one single fic, with two separate stories happening at the same time and lightly interacting with each other, in this case, Gabriel and Adam’s brothers at war story being one book, and Levi and Jacks  Excellent Paramilitary Adventure being another, before the two storylines meet up in one big sexy fic to wrap the whole story up. Thoughts?
           

Hey, how are you doing?

Since Star Wars Shadow Lord have made the Inquisitors actually threatening again, I'd like to mention some things I might fix with the Inquisitors:
           1. The whole flying thing with the lightsabers is replaced with them having jetboots. 
          2. After the 5th and 7th sister get their asses handed to them by Ahsoka, they could've tried to train a bit on screen, and actually learn from mistakes. 
          3. Replace the 11th Brother in TOTJ with the 6th Brother. 
          4. The 8th Brother makes use of the environment around him. (For example, when he's running from Kanan and Ahsoka on Malachor, he could throw his saber and cut down a large rock to try and fall on the Jedi, or maybe lift up smal, spiked rocks and throw them.) 
          
          That's all for now, but honestly despite their many faults, I like the Inquisitors, and I'm glad that they're slowly getting the treatment they deserve.

Just finished Horns of beacon.  Wish you could continue it or do a remake cause it was very good and well thought out

Is there any villain/threat you would have liked to see during the times between the original trilogy and the sequels? 
          
          A very specific question, but I thought something like that would be necessary. I've been thinking about this, and it's a concept I might eventually use. Who knows?
          
          Let's imagine a Mandalorian Twilek. She would have been raised by a Mandalorian clan that settled on Ryloth. As she grew up, she and her clan would become bounty hunters. Eventually, she would connect with other Mandalorian clans scattered throughout the galaxy. We would see Mandalorians of different species. The Twilek would become the leader of these diverse Mandalorians. 
          Eventually, she would challenge Bo-Katan to a duel for the Darksaber, which she would win. 
          The Mandalorian Twilek would then become Mandalore, the necromancer, because she was able to resurrect Mandalorian culture.
          She would lead the scattered Mandalorians around the galaxy and recruit many more to her culture. Once she had obtained funds through smuggling, she would lead a holy war campaign against the New Republic and the Imperial Remnant (eventually the First Order). 
          
          There, she would face a young officer, Armitage Hux, and Padawan Ben Solo.
          
          In the end, Mandalore the necromancer would be defeated by a combination of the young officers of the Imperial Remnant and Luke Skywalker's Jedi Academy.
          Ben Solo would kill the Mandalorian Twilek under Snoke's influence, hastening his fall to the dark side.
          
          This war would serve to give battle experience to the young officers of the Imperial Remnant, as well as to Ben Solo.
          
          This war would also discredit the New Republic, making it appear weak, while exposing the corruption and incompetence of the old officers of the Imperial Remnant.
          Many citizens would come to admire the empire's iron fist, and the young officers led by Snoke would stage a coup, thus creating the First Order.

So, you may have seen that I have a new White Fang character called Niles Fenrir? Yeah, I know, edgy name, but it suits him. He's not a major villain like Adam or Cinder, he's more of a supporting villain, but that doesn't take away his brutality. He's also more mysterious as barely anyone knows what he looks like, but people know he exists due to the violent scenes he leaves behind. His reputation and unknown look has caused him to be given the nickname "Spøkelse" meaning ghost or phantom. 
          Unlike Adam who is more of a commander/soldier, Niles is an assassin who secretely yet violently kills important targets of the White Fang. In a way he's a bit like Tyrian, but less insane, and he's more of an arrogant sociopath than a cackling maniac. He doesn't exactly care for politics and isn't really a leader, simply enjoying killing his people's enemies and spreading his infamy, wanting to use his reputation of a remorseless killer to make the human elite bend to the White Fang's will. If Adam was the monster humans feared in the day, Niles would be the one they feared at night. Adam is the tip of the White Fang iceberg, Niles is the bottom of it. Adam is ruthless, but kills quickly, Niles likes to make his target suffer, to increase their fear of him and the White Fang. You get my point. 
          He's much less sympathetic than Adam, Ilia or Sienna, being more pure evil along the lines of Corsac and Fennec. 
          Weiss is so far the only human who has survived Niles, and now knows what he looks like.