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Adam: Well, well, well. If it isn't Winter Schnee, you know I've been looking forward for this duel. And when I kill you I will mail your head to your father.
          	Winter: Knowing him he'd probably sell it for profit.
          	Adam:.... Are you okay?
          	Winter: No... anyways, I haven't got the time to fight you *Proceeds to kick Adam in the balls*
          	Adam: *Error.404.AdamTaurus.Broken*
          	All other male villains in Rwby: Arghhhh, gods, of all places why did she choose the balls?
          	Non-Rwby male villains: Fuck, even we felt that, and we've from different franchises. 
          	Darth Maul: Good thing that doesn't work on me, anymore.

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Adam: Well, well, well. If it isn't Winter Schnee, you know I've been looking forward for this duel. And when I kill you I will mail your head to your father.
          Winter: Knowing him he'd probably sell it for profit.
          Adam:.... Are you okay?
          Winter: No... anyways, I haven't got the time to fight you *Proceeds to kick Adam in the balls*
          Adam: *Error.404.AdamTaurus.Broken*
          All other male villains in Rwby: Arghhhh, gods, of all places why did she choose the balls?
          Non-Rwby male villains: Fuck, even we felt that, and we've from different franchises. 
          Darth Maul: Good thing that doesn't work on me, anymore.

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Yuma: Yo, boss. The High Leader has asked for a private meeting with you?
          Adam: Private meeting? Since when did she do those?
          Yuma: I dunno, but she's ordering you to her private chambers... also, don't you think she's been acting strangely lately?
          Adam: Shes has, but I may as well get this over with.
          *Adam then enters Sienna's chambers. All he sees is nothing but a bed before hearing the door behind him being locked, as Sienna is behind him*
          Sienna: It's that time again, Adam. I'll make sure to pay you this time. 
          Adam: *Sighs* My time has come.

Olympiatookmysoul

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Sienna: Listen buster, I got to continue the Khan bloodline and unfortunately you were the first man that popped in my head. So buckle the fuck up. Let’s see how wild this rodeo gets. *She licks her lips*
            
            Adam: That’s kinda racist.
            
            Sienna: Shut up and get on the bed boy! *She pulls out a whip*
            
            Adam: YES MOMMY!
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Olympiatookmysoul

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How I picture a Salem the CSR gang going:
          
          Salem: You know,’I’m gonna have a little fun with you, YOU will choose the form of your destructor!
          
          Jack: Okay, okay I think I got this! Very cute! It will be whatever we think of! So if we think of Levi’s wife, then Levi’s wife will appear and destroy us! So everyone clear your heads! Empty your minds! We only have one shot at this!
          
          Salem: The destructor has been chosen!
          
          Jack: Whoa! Whoa! No one chose anything! Did you choose anything?
          
          Levi: No!
          
          Jack: Did you?!
          
          Adam: My mind is totally blank!
          
          Jack: I didn’t think of anything!
          
          *Everyone turns to face Gabriel*
          
          Gabriel: I couldn’t help it. It just popped in there!
          
          Jack: What?! What just “popped in there”?
          
          Gabriel: I tried to think of the most harmless thing possible. 
          
          Levi: LOOK!
          
          Gabriel: NO! It can’t be!
          
          Adam: What did you think of Gabriel?!~ Holy shit!
          
          *A giant Grimm Rabbit appears*
          
          Gabriel: It’s the Pumpkin Pete Marshmallow Bunny.
          
          Grimm Bunny: *Roars*
          
          Jack: Wells there something you don’t see everyday. 
          
          Gabriel: I tried to think of the most harmless thing! Something from my childhood! Something that could never ever possibly destroy us!
          
          Adam: *Scoffing* Good thinking Gabriel!
          
          Gabriel: We used to eat Pumpkin Pete with Dad as we watched cartoons on Saturday Mornings!
          
          Jack: Gabriel has gone bye-bye Levi. What have you got left?
          
          Levi: Sorry boss, I’m terrified beyond the capacity of rational thought.
          
          
          
          
          
          

GeneralVortex06

@Olympiatookmysoul Heh.  Nice Ghostbuster reference
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GeneralVortex06

If I was writing the White Fang in volume 4 as well as Sienna and Adam, I'll keep Sienna alive longer and instead give Adam a rival who constantly gets in the way. Both try to get Sienna to back their plans, but she doesn't know who to back. Eventually the rivalry hits it's breaking point and Sienna comes up with a plan to deal with both the plans and the rivalry. That is to get Adam and the rival to fight to the death, the one who survives will have their plan go ahead. 
          Anyway Adam and his rival right, Adam struggles but wins the fight and so then Sienna allows him to attack Haven, but warns him that if he fails, then there will be concequences.

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@GeneralVortex06 What if this rival has powers of magnetism? A nice reference to Magneto.  If you wonder about Pyrrha, she seems to have control over non-magnetic metals. This guy would be exclusively capable of controlling magnetic metals.
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GeneralVortex06

@Cosmicadventurer22 Yeah, I think that's the idea many people wanted, and if you ask me it is the way Crwby should've gone with him.
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GeneralVortex06

*Little thing including the overarching villain of my original story*
          Blake: There's no such thing as pure evil.
          Andrew Skultun: *Currently crucifying someone upside down* What was that, girl?
          Blake: I... I take that back.
          Andrew: Have you ever met the Great Reaper before?
          Blake: No.
          Andrew: *Takes out a buzzsaw* Would you like to?

Olympiatookmysoul

Been thinking about some new Grimm to put into my story. Best place to look for inspiration is the Cryptid wiki. Here’s what I got.
          
          Skunk Ape: Bigfoot looking creatures, live in wetlands and swamps (obviously) and give off toxic fumes that smell horrible and prolonged exposure to them can lead to headaches, coughs, vision loss, vomiting blood, loss of conciseness, and death.
          
          Enfield: A three legged creature with a bug-like mouth filled with razor sharp teeth, has short arms with claws like bayonets. Can cover an area of 50-feet in only three jumps. Know for their agility, aggression, and durability.
          
          Death Raptors: Large humanoid creatures with a wingspan of 10 feet. Have clawed hands and are known to be incredibly fast, and incredibly aggressive, and have no fear and have been reported to attack cars and even fly into cities and other highly populated areas. Is said to have a paralyzing gaze.
          
          Sword Ray: Giant creatures that stalk costal waters and are one to swim up rivers. Can grow up to 20-feet in length. Are build like a torpedo and have been known to ram and sink boats. Have a mouth of massive, dagger-like teeth. It is claimed that it is responsible or the disappearances of several fishermen in rivers across Remmant.

Olympiatookmysoul

@GeneralVortex06 
            The secret trick to making a good Grimm, is to just jump onto the Cryptid wiki and just go up to the search bar and type a random letter in it, then you can just scroll results, the process can be repeated an unlimted amount of times and you’ll always find something new and cool. (That or just watch every episode of River Monsters and take your pick on whatever monstrosity Jermy pulled out of water) (Also might just make a bestiary of all my fan-made Grimm) 
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GeneralVortex06

@Olympiatookmysoul I love the sound of Sword Rays and Death Raptors, Enfields also seem fun.
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Olympiatookmysoul

So after a while I though of some themes for the CSR trio:
          
          Jack: Invisible (Duran Duran)
          
          Levi: Just Close Your Eyes (Story of the Year)
          
          Gabriel: Smells Like Teen Spirit (Nirvana)
          
          
          Bonus:
          
          Molay: Come as You Are (Nirvana)
          
          William: Mr Self Destruct (Nine-Inch Nails)

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*What would happen if CIS Adam invaded Remnant, but the huntresses were competant* 
          Separatist Adam: Ahahahaha. Yes, yes. Crush them my droid armies, show the huntresses no mercy.
          Pyrrha: *Exists*
          Separatist Adam: Oh fuck, I forgot about you.
          Pyrrha: *Uses sembalance to crush Adam's armies*
          Sep Adam: No, no, no, no. This can't be happing!!!! Wait, I can just use the force *Force chokes*
          Pyrrha: Ugh.... h... harder.
          Sep Adam: *sigh* You know what, nah, I'm not doing this anymore. *Commits seppuku*

Olympiatookmysoul

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Pyrrha: That’s it? Come on the way you’re dressed! The black outfit, the mask! Freaking tease!
            
            Adam: S-stop you’re ruining this for me, you’re ruing the Force for me! That was me trying to kill you!
            
            Pyrrha: Trying to kill me? I’ve wore turtle necks tighter than that!
            
            Adam: What did you say?!
            
            Pyrrha: Is that a baby Grimm choking me? Oh it’s just Adam? Oh okay!
            
            Adam: You are testing my patience! 
            
            Pyrrha: OH YES! YES! YES!
            
            Adam: Ah NO! THAT DID NOT JUST HAPPEN!! I can like feel it! I am calling upon the mystical powers of the universe to torture you! Not get you off! You perv!
            
            Pyrrha: Hold on, let me get Jaune , let’s get “fully operational” in here!
            
            Adam…
            
            *Cuts to Pyrrha getting thrown in the trash compactor where a trash squid promptly attacks her*
            
            Pyrrha: J-Jackpot! 
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Cleanlychunk31Fury1

So your going go redo the horns of beacon? I thought I was pretty good

GeneralVortex06

@Cleanlychunk31Fury1 Yeah, eventually. The new one will have less grammar mistakes, it'll be written better (I started the original when I was 15) and Adam will start off less friendly towards humans, so he will have some better development.
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Olympiatookmysoul

Is it weird that I created a full on culture for the Branwen tribe? Like, folklore, customs and Tribal Codes?

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@GeneralVortex06 
            Yeah, awhile back I made a joke character that has slowly turned into something I might make into a semi-serious fic down the road. 
            Basically what started as a joke about those “Third kid in Ruby and Yang’s family”  fics (The ones that can range from “eh”to the absolutely insane ramblings of an edgy 9th grader who thinks he’s the shit.) but basically his backstory boils down to Raven going 
            “Well I’m gonna bail soon, might as well bang Tai one last time for the lols.” *9 months later* “Well, at least they look like me this time” 
            Kid grows up in the tribe, his name is Edgar, he’s a massive mama’s boy (He’s like, one of two people that Raven actually likes and cares about) . Inherited the “turn into a bird” trick, and instead of running off to join Ruby and the gang, he’s full ride-or-die Branwen. Basically if Yang is a pallet swap of Raven who takes after Tai, Edgar is a pallet swap of Tai who takes after Raven. He also calls Ruby his “replacement” and talks all sorts of shit about Summer (He can do the math, the timing does not do any favors for Summer) Also legendary birds. Those exist, three of them to be exact, The Thunder Hawk, the Fire Falcon, and the Snow Eagle (Plez don’t sue me game freak)  and each of them have selected a vessel of Branwen blood to be reincarnated into. (This was going to lead into a joke where a Schnee kid (most likely Whitley because lol) is going to be in for quite the surprise,  all while Qrow whistles and taps his foot)
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GeneralVortex06

@Olympiatookmysoul Nah, not really. I spend way too much time on the lore of my villain factions, like giving them an ideology, laws and government, I put more lore into the villains than I do with the protagonists. It's weird, but I always seem to prefer writing villain characters/groups, they just feel more fun to write about and I don't know why.
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