GeoshSun

NEW rewrite! Comments/feedback appreciated, even begged for  
          	
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          	Dear Son,
          	
          	If you are reading this letter:
          	
          	1. We are dead.
          	2. You are currently wondering who you are and what your name is.
          	3. You're probably in a hospital. If so, they will be coming for you any moment now...
          	
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/298302175-the-fifth-healer

leiana52

@GeoshSun You're welcome!
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GeoshSun

@leiana52 thanks very much for this feedback!
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leiana52

@GeoshSun She's blunt, focused on the facts, direct, and not as concerned about emotions. Some women do tend toward that side—but the general female default is toward emotions, especially in high-stress situations. Ainsley shows *zero* fear in chapter 7, when she's just been kidnapped and has found herself next to a strange boy for an undetermined amount of time. It's unnatural for her to be at *least* a little nervous.
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GeoshSun

NEW rewrite! Comments/feedback appreciated, even begged for  
          
          ***
          
          Dear Son,
          
          If you are reading this letter:
          
          1. We are dead.
          2. You are currently wondering who you are and what your name is.
          3. You're probably in a hospital. If so, they will be coming for you any moment now...
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/298302175-the-fifth-healer

leiana52

@GeoshSun You're welcome!
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GeoshSun

@leiana52 thanks very much for this feedback!
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leiana52

@GeoshSun She's blunt, focused on the facts, direct, and not as concerned about emotions. Some women do tend toward that side—but the general female default is toward emotions, especially in high-stress situations. Ainsley shows *zero* fear in chapter 7, when she's just been kidnapped and has found herself next to a strange boy for an undetermined amount of time. It's unnatural for her to be at *least* a little nervous.
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GeoshSun

Just marked this story COMPLETE 
          
          Complete with twists you never saw coming. 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/328761128-heists-for-hire-an-action-thriller

GeoshSun

@rmedmond music to an author's ears
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RBecMarie

Oh no, now I’m going to end up binge reading this instead of being productive this morning! Haha
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