GerricTimestrider

So, it turns out my story, after reading it over, was kind of terrible. and that's on, I mean that's what I expect, you know, it's my first story, and I tried, and I failed. "yyyaaaay-" moving on, I probably shouldn't have made this update with PeanutButterGamer's voice stuck in my head. any ideas on what I should write? lemme know please, I'm stupid, I need help. 

Since this is my first story I would like to have some feedback. so whenever you, people that have read it, have a minute, please let me know. -Gerric Timestrider