uranusadvena

Hey, how are you doing and happy holidays. I read through some of your chapters and wanted to share you with some tips (Don't worry, they are free.) Just let me know if your open to conversation.
          If you are wondering why I am doing this, it is because I have an author friend and he tends to help other writers—myself included. So I want to pass on what little I have to help you out be better. 
          Looking forward to a response. 
          Keep up the good work.

uranusadvena

Sorry for the late reply, holidays are just as busy as any day. So this is what I can offer you and I hope it helps:
            
            1. Paragraph breaks, it was hard to follow since I didn't know when to move on from one scene to another. If you give an enter space, the flow will be very fluent to readers. 
            2. Character introductions, I don't know the main character much, why should I follow her? Who is she? How does she look? It is important to make the introduction scenes of your characters stand out (even support cast).
            3. The spacing MUST be added when a conversation is happening, I couldn't tell who was saying what and it al felt jumbled. 
            4. Don't give up. Perseverance matters most for writers, and polishing is part of our ordeals. 
            5. I'm cheering for you. Keep up the good work. And hey, if you want, I am open to advice, too. We are all learning. 
            Good luck!
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GiuliaFrancesca11

Hi !Thank you for reaching out and for taking the time to read some of my chapters—I really appreciate it! I’m definitely open to hearing your tips and thoughts. It’s always great to connect with others in the writing community and learn from different perspectives.
            
            Looking forward to your insights. And thank you again for your kind words and offer to help!
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