Popylopy4
Hey I just wanted to say I love your books and I want you to continue so here some things I should let you know:
-I think there should more dialogue (i feel like the whole day is eating and sleep like don’t write “after they argued” “then they argued” u have to write what they argued about)you get me..but I like how u started writing Gregors thoughts and his outbursts.
-(hey wheres ripred)I think u forgot about him but he’s supposed annoy Gregor the whole time that’s his purpose in life......LOL
-and about ideas to continue:I don’t exactly know where u said there keeping his dad but obviously it’s somewhere in the uncharted territory and crabs needs to stay moist so I think there hideout should be some kinda muddy environment ...u know
-(I don’t exactly approve of his dad being captured like he just magically appeared)so I think once the rescue group arrives (couple days)(they obviously have to some challenges on the way)they get there right on time to save his dad from a public execution where’s he’s being drowned in mud while all the crabs watch so they escape with there lives Mareth obviously has to get heavily injured tryna save gregors dad(since he did say he understood)soooo ya if u want to let me know u read this or want more ideas Just let me know.................................
