Hello readers!
Thank you so much for your suggestions, comments and correction. Some of the comments made me feel like I am doing English literature exam AH stress!
I will try to change the bits you suggested as soon as possible. Just to clarify the first chapter was an introductory chap that's why it was a it fast and I tried to be as slow as possible in the next chaps.
Also there are some bits that are taken from my own experience and life and also the emotions I put in my characters (in the beginning is a bit sad) are also my personal ( I was going through bad times when I started writing this book as a distraction) so I am sorry if you feel that the emotions are too much..
At the end I want to say that I still love my readers. I am by a professional writer, it was actually a way to improve my vocabulary so please bare with me. I will try to edit it to make it a tasty story
Love Gumnaam xxxx