H.B Richards

Time. It's quite strange, isn't it? No matter how much we do, how readily we prepare, it's inescapable.
          
          Anyways, chapter 1 of Time is out. Hopefully whoever reads it enjoys it. Cheers :)

hi, Anne here, you applied for a feedback in my critique shop! I'm going to start with your feedback very soon expect my comments on your work latest by 20th/21st Mar so pls complete the payment I think 2/3 chaps are still pending thanks :)

Chapter 0 has been revised! I went with a slightly different direction with it than before. Tell me what you think :D
          
          (That means if it's terrible too!)

I was going to work on chapter 3, but I think Chapter 0 needs a bit more work first! Out of the chapters so far, that one is the weakest.
          
          Sorry for the delay. Chapter 0 will be stronger than ever when I'm done!
          
          Also, I will be experimenting with dialogue and exposition in private. This may bleed into the story at some point, but I will make sure to consistently update the previous chapters to make it coherent.
          
          Cheers :)
          
          H.B.

Alright, should be a bit better. I'm struggling with dialogue quite a bit, but that'll do until I decide to revisit it.
          
          Chapter 2 is done! (Sort of)

'Chapter 2: Desire' Is a bit of a mess, so I'm going to fix it up. I thought it was really good while writing, and while it has some really good things, I'm going to rework the dialogue a bit. Sorry about that!

I know people probably aren't going to be seeing this, but if you have any criticisms, corrections, or even just comments, this is another spot you can do it!