Halley_Abbagail

Hey anyone on rn

Halley_Abbagail

Ummm. could someone read the first chapter of the book that I  published? Its an old idea and I was curious if its any good.

Halley_Abbagail

which parts? I knew that I needed to fix some part but haven't been able to get back to it. Thanks for the review!
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Dayelight

@HalleyCat I think the story is good. It would help it flow better, if you told the reader who was saying what,because at some points I had to reread to figure out which character was talking. You did a great job developing a plot for the story:)
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