Halotog

sorry I know I said I would update more frequently but I have been super busy with the break and various issues but I promise to be more punctual in the future

Halotog

first I would like to say thanks to DomDominguez for giving me great feedback and second I am going to get back to writing this, I'm sorry I took a break for a while, but I am very busy and am going to try my absolute hardest to give you guys a new chapter every other week.

DomDominguez

Ok I just read Deadly force, and it's good, but I have 2 minor complaints or observations.oops I usually don't use big words but using my tablet and it's spell check really helps to write the proper word s.anyway I'm getting off track I do that a lot. Ok the first a chapter was short n sweet it got me easily how he was being ordered to tell his story. Second chapter good attack scene being boarded by Androids and you telling about what types they are good good, then on desert planet and the underground dangers, it all has me thinking yeah getting better, so when I goto cchapter 3 it's a repeat of chapter 2 and then chapter 4wouldnt load up Arrgh. Maybe my internet connection is bad or I'm just messed up. Anyway I was wondering if you were going to add a partner or sidekick to the main character, male or female who was a gung-ho badass you know to balance out the admirals calmer personality. So those are my thoughts ,you are more than welcome to tell me to piss off or not. Thank you.