Hamartias

@olivieah Okay, I think I get it now. I had to read that twice, but thanks for actually reading what my comments. Very few writers do. Sorry to be a nuisance if I was! And I hope you win the watty awards. I think that it will win if you clear up some misconceptions. :)

Thankyou for the criticism, I really do appreciate it! I know something's don't add up, but I'm going to edit it soon before watty awards. There's just something's I forget to explain which makes it seem unrealistic when it isn't. Jake raped her but Lexi was on  birth pills at the time...she started to not take them as soon as she was away from Jake, knowing she wasn't going to have sex. Obviously she made the wrong choice. Michael caught up with Jake because while Michael was searching for his car, Jake was bounding up Lexi. So there isn't much time difference. Jake was driving fast but not fast enough because he wasn't aware Michael was behind closing in on him...Lexi is a mess inside and out, she is confused and she doesn't know what she wants. That's what I wa trying to portray, a broken girl, a broken everything. She couldn't explain herself, yet she wanted Michael to believe Jake was a sick man, she wanted to be protected... The baby did die in the end, (sorry for ruining it.) but I know when a baby should die or when it shouldn't because I know what's realistic and what isn't. ..it was my plan to edit it after the story is finished as I am aware of some lack of detail I should have put in to make things more understandable..I really appreciate the criticism though! Thankyou! All my love, olivieah x

Lolol. Thanks. He's like my life. haha k bye.

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