Okay so I'm editing mistake baby and adding things in. I was reading the cheating scene attempting to edit it and I realised that it was really short, rushed and just didn't seem like the characters at all.
Bailey and Jeydon were drunk at the start of the chapter but you don't really know that. It comes of as if Bailey wasn't consenting at the start but he was! I assure you he was!
So this brings my next question and if I don't get much response here on my message board I'll post a new update in the book so you guys will get the question quicker instead of thinking I'm just writing another dumb status update.
I was contemplating writing more at the beginning of the chapter about them actually doing their 'bonding time' where they were, what they were doing and how they ended up with their little 'fling'. I figured I'd write about what I pictured them doing on their bonding time and how I pictured everything happening. Then put it at the start.
Do you guys like that idea? It would mean a lot of past readers would either miss out on knowing what happened or they would have to reread the chapter but it would provide more detail and more of an explanation.
Let me know what you guys think.
As always love you all
-A.C