Mera2876

Hi! Thanks for becoming a fan! That's really cool. I read your story and I think you're onto something. The plot is good and so is the dialogue. My advice would be to leave a space between paragraphs, it makes it easier to read. And also proofread at least three times, I always catch the biggest mistakes on my last read-through. Also take some more time with descriptions, it helps the reader to process new characters in their heads before the story moves on. I'm really impressed with how many threads you've set up to follow and I can't wait to find out what happens to Raz. 
          If you any advice for me, I'd love to hear it. This is my first time writing. 
          Thanks again. :)

supernatural_yea

Hey, I love you­r work. You are an awesome writer! 
          If you have tim­­­­e could you check out my­ s­to­ry­, I would really b­e gr­atef­ul. ­It's my firs­t one,­ and i­ts not­ finis­hed yet ­but feed­back is ­­always appreciated. 
          Here is a link ­­­­just in case you have th­e ­ti­me to read it: 
          http://www.watt­­­­pad.com/368564-chapter-1-him 
          Thanks for your time :) 
          By the way I love House of Night books too :)

maryasha

hi, would you mind reading my story, i would love some constructive criticism and what you think about it
          
          "All Boy's School Survival Guide" for girls
          
          Synopsis:
          
          Aliza is in a binding situation, literally! With her breasts constricted, wearing her brother's loose clothing, and dropping her voice to the lowest level, she's attending Ascham, an all boy's school! If that's not enough, throw in an extremely hot roommate, who suspects Aliza, aka Alex, of not being exactly what "he" appears to be and you have a chaotic relationship---if you can even call it that.
          http://www.wattpad.com/257206-quot-all-boys-school-survival-guide-quot-for-girls