Happy_chin

@OwO_megaa nonono YOU DID IT PERFECTLY XD that's the reasons why I forget little details! I FORGET those details. I don't write down this whole storyline and plot on paper nor in general so I'm just taking this story somewhere in ANY direction. My lack of motivation is also a reason too. During this specific time frame during the summer, my mental state slowly goes to it's worst then peaks up again in the winter and fall. I'm not taking this harshly at all ^v^ in fact this criticism made me REALLY happy because my goal is to conevy emotion through my writing and drop little details which makes in known as MY writing and has it's own style. I actually do truly forget the details I note in my stories so I often need to go and look back on my chapters viewed as a reader. I even forget the last names to each character sometimes!! XD hope I get to he the next J.K Rowling, a new chapter is being uploaded at exactly 12am! Till then, stay awesome :))

@OwO_megaa heya so I finished reading last night and it was really good! But since you asked for critique I'll have to provide. Honestly, your writing is beautiful it shows emotions very well and it's so description but in your story telling you drop a lot of little details that never get brought up again like when Patton sees Virgil's vent art. Patton isn't one to just ignore that, he would definitely bring it up subtly to make sure Virgil is ok. I think that mainly comes from your lack of motivation to write making your updates far apart so you just kinda forget or you just haven't brought it up yet seeing as the story isn't finished. Anyway I may have wrote that wrong so don't take it to harshly. I love your work and can't wait for the next update! <3

@Happy_chin oooo by the way!! Be as honest as possible! I want to be the best writer I can be. I think I've found my career path at just 13 :)