Sharyn_Jael

Hi 
          sorry to bother you
          Can you please give my book a read and give me a feedback?
          "The Gang Leader's Angel" https://my.w.tt/0P9mIGtZNV
          Thank you, have a good day/night :)

Heart_Watt

@Sreeja2k Okay lol it is a bit longer than I anticipated to be honest, so I can't read the whole thing right now, but I read some of the first chapter and the desc. I like the storyline but I've noticed some of your sentences are extremely long, and you use a lot of the same word in one sentence, so try re-wording things a bit. Also make things sound a bit more professional, fancy up some words or something, it makes you sound more sophisticated and makes people want to read more.
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Heart_Watt

@Sreeja2k Yeah of course! I'll do it right now.
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caliexroses

hello, sorry to bother you, but do you mind checking out my book, “chaotic affections “ and giving feedback if you can? thank you <3

Heart_Watt

@calrosalie The best stories, in my opinion, are the ones that make you cry, and by just reading a bit of the first couple chapters I can tell it will be one of those. The grammar is great as far as I can tell, and a lot if stories like this, people can overreact, and some of the important facts seem really weird. But this is very well put together, I honestly have no pointers at this moment, but I'll let you know if i have any advice for you.
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Heart_Watt

@calrosalie I love the description, but make sure you use apostrophes where they are needed, like in the word "she's"
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Heart_Watt

@calrosalie Yeah of course! Not sure I can give the bestest advice, but I'll check it out in a moment after I finish the last few chapters of a book I'm reading.
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