Dragon God

@HeavenAscensionDIO yes!

@khaneoshikki the serial killer angle has already been taken
            
            so how about a cult leader using their stand to seem like a god to their followers with the plan to take over the world?

@HeavenAscensionDIO thanks it took forever to come up with an ability that wasn't already taken or too similar to something else, and don't worry, this stand does have a music reference.
            
            The song referenced is separate ways by journey.
            
            Finally enough I was honestly thinking of making this into a full part I could put in between part three and four. 
            
            I was thinking the Jojo could be a detective trying to catch a serial killer who somehow is defying logic and time. 
            
            He knows who the killer is but because the killer is both a good man in public eye and he always has an alibi and can be pointed to never be at the places of the crimes at the exact time they happened.
            
            I was thinking of either giving this JoJo a support-based stand or no stand, like just really good detective skills and hand-to-hand combat of course.

@Themanofthehour welcome back

@Warangel0415 happy new year

@sejiku ive seen some manhwas but havent read that one yet
            try and figure out a way to get him there first that makes sense

@HeavenAscensionDIO Thank you! As of now, I used your pointers and created a new chapter.
            
            Thank you, I really appreciate this.

@sejiku alright, here are some more general tips since your writing seems alright thus far
            if I notice any issues I will point them out
            
            
            first is that its a bad idea to start with an idea and try and build the story to reach the idea because that almost always leads to a bad story
            
            you the idea should be the starting platform and the story grows off the idea
            
            if you start with an idea and dont properly set it or the story up you could end up with a situation like with gojo from jujutsu kaisen, gege quickly grew to hate gojo and ended up writing a rather bullshit ending all because gege started with the idea of what he wanted gojo to have and didnt consider the implications those abilities would have on the story
            
            
            a way he could have handled it much better would involve the inverted spear of heaven
            its origins and how it broke is unknown, a very simple solution would be for sukuna to be the one who crafted it and it broke in a fight with kinjaku
            
            this would lead to sukuna being able to create another one to deal with gojo without sukuna surviving things he completely and utterly shouldnt and wouldnt lead to some super bullshit ending
            
            
            another important thing is forshadowing, the key to proper forshadowing is to make sure you wouldnt be able to tell its forshadowing until AFTER what it forshadows happens
            
            a good examples of this is the jjba openings as when watching you see so many events but never analyze it then the event happens

@sejiku ild have to see your writing style and give you pointers based off it, be right back

@thestroneer i know :)

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