HeavenAscensionDIO

If someone finds this
          	Can they make a ryoko x tenchi story
          	from the animes tenchi muyo and tenchi universe

-LadiesMan217-

Hello there! I've recently dropped a MHA x DC harem story! I'd greatly appreciate you checking it out and giving feed back if you're open to it :)

HeavenAscensionDIO

@-LadiesMan217- ill check it out but as I mentioned I said moral, not righteous
            
            there is a difference between the two
            moral means they see lines of good and bad and try and to good
            
            righteous would be trying to force your morals on others, both if the others are in the wrong or even if the others are in the right
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-LadiesMan217-

@HeavenAscensionDIO that’s no problem my friend! I understand :) if you do want that, my Tai Lung story is VERY much like that! He’s a very much righteous person where it’s focused on character development  if that’s what you prefer
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HeavenAscensionDIO

@-LadiesMan217- 
            ill be completely honest
            
            im not going to rate the story because it isnt for my tastes
            with stories involving the MHA universe I prefer the protagonist have a good moral compass just because I like a majority of the characters and wish more of them could have had their issues solved in better ways
            
            as such I doubt I can give good advice on any problems in it without any bias leaking through
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khaneoshikki

Finally...
          
          After over 2 years researching and studying, I have created a stand that is powerful but balanced. 
          
          I would like to introduce you to...
          
          Name: Seperate Ways
          
          Type: humanoid.
          
          Ability: Time Travel.
          
          Description: the user of separate ways can travel backwards or forwards in time, with a single hour being the maximum amount of time the user can go back or forward.
          
          The user will be transported to either the future or the past of wherever they are at that moment, even if they themselves were not at that place an hour ago. 
          
          To balance this, separate ways has a cool-down equal to the amount of time you traveled, for an example, if you traveled 17 minutes into the past or future, you would have to wait exactly 17 minutes before you can time travel again, with the max cool down being an hour equal to the max amount of time you can travel. 
          
          I don't necessarily have the stats however I was thinking of physical strength being 100 times the user's physical strength. 
          
          With the user being me, a 120 lb, 5 ft 11, 19-year-old who never exercises or works out, that would be roughly strong enough to punch a hole through a somewhat thick sheet of metal, but nothing too broken or impressive.

thestroneer

@khaneoshikki that a cool stand concept
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khaneoshikki

@HeavenAscensionDIO yes!
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HeavenAscensionDIO

@khaneoshikki the serial killer angle has already been taken
            
            so how about a cult leader using their stand to seem like a god to their followers with the plan to take over the world?
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sejiku

I have an idea I want to share with you.
          
          I don't know if you read Manhwa but what would you think about ' Survival of a Sword King' main character, Ryu Hanbin in HSR.
          
          I don't plan to make it an insert, or a male reader, like the actual MC into HSR but the thing is I don't know if it would make sense to have him wake up on Herta space station or belobog.

HeavenAscensionDIO

@sejiku ive seen some manhwas but havent read that one yet
            try and figure out a way to get him there first that makes sense
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sejiku

I found you on a few fanfics and noticed you were giving out some pointers.
          
          I was wondering if you'd be able to give me some pointers on writing in general.

sejiku

@HeavenAscensionDIO Thank you! As of now, I used your pointers and created a new chapter.
            
            Thank you, I really appreciate this.
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HeavenAscensionDIO

this message may be offensive 
@sejiku alright, here are some more general tips since your writing seems alright thus far
            if I notice any issues I will point them out
            
            
            first is that its a bad idea to start with an idea and try and build the story to reach the idea because that almost always leads to a bad story
            
            you the idea should be the starting platform and the story grows off the idea
            
            if you start with an idea and dont properly set it or the story up you could end up with a situation like with gojo from jujutsu kaisen, gege quickly grew to hate gojo and ended up writing a rather bullshit ending all because gege started with the idea of what he wanted gojo to have and didnt consider the implications those abilities would have on the story
            
            
            a way he could have handled it much better would involve the inverted spear of heaven
            its origins and how it broke is unknown, a very simple solution would be for sukuna to be the one who crafted it and it broke in a fight with kinjaku
            
            this would lead to sukuna being able to create another one to deal with gojo without sukuna surviving things he completely and utterly shouldnt and wouldnt lead to some super bullshit ending
            
            
            another important thing is forshadowing, the key to proper forshadowing is to make sure you wouldnt be able to tell its forshadowing until AFTER what it forshadows happens
            
            a good examples of this is the jjba openings as when watching you see so many events but never analyze it then the event happens
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HeavenAscensionDIO

@sejiku ild have to see your writing style and give you pointers based off it, be right back
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