Hemlock

@MissLollyGag I'm hoping to have it posted today!!

@HellishBeauty Yep. The one coming up is mostly Jasper. 

@HellishBeauty you’re getting my hopes up, do you mean Jasper???? 

@MissLollyGag That is a fair take, thank you for your insight. I was thinking of ways to address the next bit in the story and one way that sort of worked was a dream sequence or how to address what the sequence would set up. So, I'm just trying to get a consensus or others takes on it. 

@HellishBeauty as long as they aren’t so long and drawn out and they add crucial points to the plot. I used dreams in my current wip, that turned out to be premonitions. So it needed to be in there. But I kept it short, precise. 

@MissLollyGag oop, it tagged me instead. Meant to send the last bit as a reply. 

@HellishBeauty thank you, that's wonderful to hear. No, they didn't really specify. Though, they mentioned that the moment they shared towards the end felt rushed which... I don't really agree with and that Ember seemed a bit too whiny. I may not change anything, as I really like it as is, but I'll still look at it and see what I can improve. I think I'm just more hurt than anything else and I may not send that person the next chapter. 

@HellishBeauty that’s strange. I re read it again after your alterations and it flowed lovely. Very descriptive. The emotions between striker and ember was the focus and it came through well.  Did she say what was “bad” sometimes the worst critique is family and friends, and they never give a clear answer as to what’s wrong with it or what they didn’t like. 
            
            It’s why I no longer bother asking family to read. I just write for me. If it’s something that I’d want to read, then others out there may enjoy it too. 
            
            Also, some people just prefer a certain genre. You wouldn’t ask someone who loves thrillers to read fantasy. They would hate it, even if it’s the most well written story out there.