Overripemuffin57
So how is Katana Zero?
Henry-Man
Henry-Man
Hey All! Just wanted to drop by and see if you're all doing well, as well as quickly recommend a story a friend of mine has made.
This is "The Story of Tygoth" by the strong @Gigachadsteve
Basically, a group of Adventurers travel the depths of a dungeon to save the city they've called home after it has been ransacked.
I found it intriguing to read for it's slow pace, the monster encounters in it and the starting divide in the city.
I won't say anymore folks, 'cause i'd like you to read it on your own time!
20 long chapters are ready to be spelunked so far, and more on the way shortly.
As always, walk outside, drink wo' ah', and study.
Henry, AWAY!
https://www.wattpad.com/story/325223666
GigaChadSteve
@Henry-Man Also, I like feedback, so if you don't like this chapter, please tell me and I'll rewrite it.
GigaChadSteve
@Henry-Man Hey thanks man for shouting me out. I am close to getting chapter 21 done, just need to come up with a name for it.
GigaChadSteve
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This will be cringy af, but I expanded my story, if you remember, and I would like your opinion on how it's set up rn if possible. You may or mayn't be busy rn, but I hope you like reading my story, cuz I certainly was tweaking out when I read shit back to myself.
Henry-Man
@ GigaChadSteve
As long as it doesn't follow Lockheed style. I respect his choices for his stories, but it's really hard for me to read it.
I'll read it in these days.
Henry-Man
Hello everybody. You may or may not wonder where this project of mine is going to be completed.
The answer to that, i don't know myself. Apart from life, it has become difficult to find an exact format to write it out.
This doesn't mean i give up on it, so don't worry.
The main idea of my account still stands, so if you want to ask me to review stuff, i'll check yours out when i can.
I haven't come back from the dead, but i prefer to think i did.
jonathan125833
Whats your opinion on my story?
I’m curious.
jonathan125833
Also I encourage you to point out anything that could possibly need any rewriting and needs and additional information.
jonathan125833
Thanks for the response, I’ll try to improve it. I know the beginning was a bit rough. (Not good at beginning parts of a story.) Also I’m a rookie writer, but I still try to make my stories that is worthy for someone to actually read it.
But all of this information you gave me was nice to see. And I appreciate your advice about it.
But anyways, I’ll shall revise my story and rewrite some parts that need fixing.
Henry-Man
@jonathan125833 To put it simply: decent While the beginning of the story for me felt limited on what the characters were saying, the battle in the city had an awkward ending, and the ex machina (i pull out rocket launcher at 0.1 Hp before dying); i liked the concept of the Hollow Knight story, the fun references thrown in, Spamton, and i think you can make it interesting. The best thing i can advice you is to revise dialogue not to give past relevant info (Hey, remember the time badass thing happened? it made you look cool and do that thing.) You should try and incorporate it in the scene organically ([birthday] A: Getting Older, John? B: Nah, just gettin' younger. 50 years is just the start. A: Mad would've called you "Tryceratops", if he found out. B: Yeah...miss that son.. A: You'd think Corpo would hide such a death, but no. B:Why? They saw it as free adds, "Miner found dead and retrieved 1000 m. from surface with Corpo tech"? If it wasn't for such a tragedy, you'd be convinced to buy something like that, too. A: ... B: Don't think about it, just... enjoy the cake. All in all, i found it charming. Sorry for the late response, wattpad does not send notifications to my phone anymore.
boxedbullsy
Have you seen the new Spider-Man movie? Im making a HH x HB x Spider-verse story right now. IT GOT ME CRAVING FOR MORE.
jotarokujo2121
Hey I just started to write my second story and wanted to ask you to check it out if possible
Henry-Man
@ jotarokujo2121 Sorry for the long wait, i'm a bit busy with life, and your book has been a project of mine for a while now. I'll make it some sort of book so you can check out what i see in it.
It'll take a while to get everything ready, so sorry in advance (or late) if it takes too long.
lockheedhenesy
Thanks for the follow
Henry-Man
@ lockheedhenesy Not exactly something to be thankful for, but you're welcome.
I should thank YOU for following me.
Henry-Man
Hello everybody. I have come to make an announcement.
The one about the moon will come later.
A few weeks ago, i was asked to help a fellow on his story.
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"The Freelancer Pilot's Bodyguard: Book 1 The Project's Prospect"
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As the title suggests, it's about a poor guy's misadventure, who's job is to protect a pilot.
Along them, they'll travel with some known people of 'Red vs Blue'.
This intrepid band of chucklefucks are in for an adventure! Why?
Because, the mastermind and machine behind the whole story, is...
*Roll the drums*
@KriegerTechpriest !
While his books are lackluster in pages, the quality the single papers procure can capture the interest of some. We basically met in a philosofical stand off in a storie's comment section.
(And i'll add a tinge of madness on my own, don't worry!)
With this out of the way, Happy late new year, everybody!
1Girl5Husbandi
Ciao! Come stai?
Volevo proporti di leggere la mia storia su @luvfranci (si chiama La Dimora dei Morti) e mi farebbe molto piacere sapere che cosa ne pensi. Se hai tempo, ovviamente! <3
Henry-Man
@ 1Girl5Husbandi Sono incastrato con un pò di cose al momento, quando riuscirò lo metto in un libro come recensione scritta, se per the va bene.