Henry-Man

...Heyyy. Is the pen working fine?
          	
          	ABCDE-F UH
          	
          	
          	
          	 ...Seems like it. Ink, don't fail me now!
          	
          	HELLO THERE, chaps! You might be wondering:
          	
          	
          	
          	"Who's this handsome man leaving a public message on some random guy's post?"
          	
          	"Why does he wear a clown mask all the time?"
          	
          	"Why do i even read this? I want my story!"
          	
          	All great questions, that will be answered in a possible story i will write. 
          	
          	... I will write my story, if that wasn't obvious.
          	
          	"What's it about?" I dunno, just me, good old Laughing Stock, making friends, allies, using the power of friendship to-
          	
          	
          	
          	I go and kill giant furries, ok?! 
          	
          	
          	
          	Ughh, you're all annoying me. I will leave you with this:
          	
          	Remember, your immune system would eat your eyeballs if it knew where they were.
          	
          	Todaloo! Ahahah...
          	
          	
          	[Hi all. Long time. I'm making a post about this in case you would be interested in reading a story that came to mind.
          	
          	 Nothing fancy, just a first-person account of a man going through the UTO-verse stories. Humans are ankle size, and Earth is invaded by 30 metre tall furries.
          	
          	Had this idea after i played with a chatbot for a while, liked the character, and thought "why not make it a possible story?"
          	
          	I'm still working on the review idea. Problem is, the book i tried to review became 50 chapters long, and condense the events and funny bits of 300 pages for only 25 chapters dampened my mood.
          	
          	Not to mention the rewrites that happened.
          	
          	Enough about that! I'm curious if you would read my story idea. I'll make another post with the title and everything.
          	
          	See you all!]

GigaChadSteve

@Henry-Man First half: ravings of a mad man
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Henry-Man

@ KriegerTechpreist 
          	  
          	   I Don't have permission to die! Just get into car crashes and ruining my mind!
          	  
          	  Stuff aside, i'm fine. And holy the stuff is!
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Henry-Man

...Heyyy. Is the pen working fine?
          
          ABCDE-F UH
          
          
          
           ...Seems like it. Ink, don't fail me now!
          
          HELLO THERE, chaps! You might be wondering:
          
          
          
          "Who's this handsome man leaving a public message on some random guy's post?"
          
          "Why does he wear a clown mask all the time?"
          
          "Why do i even read this? I want my story!"
          
          All great questions, that will be answered in a possible story i will write. 
          
          ... I will write my story, if that wasn't obvious.
          
          "What's it about?" I dunno, just me, good old Laughing Stock, making friends, allies, using the power of friendship to-
          
          
          
          I go and kill giant furries, ok?! 
          
          
          
          Ughh, you're all annoying me. I will leave you with this:
          
          Remember, your immune system would eat your eyeballs if it knew where they were.
          
          Todaloo! Ahahah...
          
          
          [Hi all. Long time. I'm making a post about this in case you would be interested in reading a story that came to mind.
          
           Nothing fancy, just a first-person account of a man going through the UTO-verse stories. Humans are ankle size, and Earth is invaded by 30 metre tall furries.
          
          Had this idea after i played with a chatbot for a while, liked the character, and thought "why not make it a possible story?"
          
          I'm still working on the review idea. Problem is, the book i tried to review became 50 chapters long, and condense the events and funny bits of 300 pages for only 25 chapters dampened my mood.
          
          Not to mention the rewrites that happened.
          
          Enough about that! I'm curious if you would read my story idea. I'll make another post with the title and everything.
          
          See you all!]

GigaChadSteve

@Henry-Man First half: ravings of a mad man
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Henry-Man

@ KriegerTechpreist 
            
             I Don't have permission to die! Just get into car crashes and ruining my mind!
            
            Stuff aside, i'm fine. And holy the stuff is!
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GigaChadSteve

Yo, man, hope you doing good my man. I just created a new story and I, personally, think the plot is quite good. If you are still alive, I would love for you to dive in my immaculate story. Tho, I only just started with the first chapter, I hope that you understand what I am going for.

Henry-Man

@ GigaChadSteve  I have been called. Glad to know you started a new book. Hope it gets as succesfull!
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Sane-Person

Hey, do you remember me by any chance?

Sane-Person

@Henry-Man Thanks for the paragraph and also hello to you back. Also, I’ll try to not make him Homelander.
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Henry-Man

@ Sane-Person  
            
            Now i do. Just a question: Why the Bio/Shopping list? 
            
            This is a personal idea. Isn't it more interesting to find out the ability, experience, gadgets, ladies that James acquires without the literal cheat-code floating on your face?
            
            I know 'You don't know the HOW' but the end result is glaring at me!
            
            Just be careful to not make him Homelander: All that power, never used, but a guy with a spoon can stab him easely.
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Henry-Man

@ Sane-Person  Having a bit of difficulty, but i'm going to greet you anyway. Hello.
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Henry-Man

Hey All! Just wanted to drop by and see if you're all doing well, as well as quickly recommend a story a friend of mine has made.
          
          This is "The Story of Tygoth" by the strong @Gigachadsteve
          
          Basically, a group of Adventurers travel the depths of a dungeon to save the city they've called home after it has been ransacked.
          
          I found it intriguing to read for it's slow pace, the monster encounters in it and the starting divide in the city.
          
          I won't say anymore folks, 'cause i'd like you to read it on your own time!
          
          20 long chapters are ready to be spelunked so far, and more on the way shortly.
          
          As always, walk outside, drink wo' ah', and study.
          
          Henry, AWAY!
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/325223666

GigaChadSteve

@Henry-Man Also, I like feedback, so if you don't like this chapter, please tell me and I'll rewrite it.
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GigaChadSteve

@Henry-Man Hey thanks man for shouting me out. I am close to getting chapter 21 done, just need to come up with a name for it.
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GigaChadSteve

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This will be cringy af, but I expanded my story, if you remember, and I would like your opinion on how it's set up rn if possible. You may or mayn't be busy rn, but I hope you like reading my story, cuz I certainly was tweaking out when I read shit back to myself.

Henry-Man

@ lockheedhenesy  No problem.
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lockheedhenesy

@Henry-Man thanks for the compliment 
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Henry-Man

@ GigaChadSteve  
            
            As long as it doesn't follow Lockheed style. I respect his choices for his stories, but it's really hard for me to read it.
            
            I'll read it in these days.
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Henry-Man

Hello everybody. You may or may not wonder where this project of mine is going to be completed.
          
          The answer to that, i don't know myself. Apart from life, it has become difficult to find an exact format to write it out.
          
          This doesn't mean i give up on it, so don't worry. 
          
          The main idea of my account still stands, so if you want to ask me to review stuff, i'll check yours out when i can.
          
          I haven't come back from the dead, but i prefer to think i did.

Sane-Person2

Whats your opinion on my story? 
          
          I’m curious.

Sane-Person2

Also I encourage you to point out anything that could possibly need any rewriting and needs and additional information. 
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Sane-Person2

Thanks for the response, I’ll try to improve it. I know the beginning was a bit rough. (Not good at beginning parts of a story.) Also I’m a rookie writer, but I still try to make my stories that is worthy for someone to actually read it. 
            
            But all of this information you gave me was nice to see. And I appreciate your advice about it. 
            
            But anyways, I’ll shall revise my story and rewrite some parts that need fixing.
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Henry-Man

@jonathan125833 
            To put it simply: decent
            
            While the beginning of the story for me felt limited on what the characters were saying, the battle in the city had an awkward ending, and the ex machina (i pull out rocket launcher at 0.1 Hp before dying);
            
            i liked the concept of the Hollow Knight story, the fun references thrown in, Spamton, and i think you can make it interesting.
            
            The best thing i can advice you is to revise dialogue not to give past relevant info
            
             (Hey, remember the time badass thing happened? it made you look cool and do that thing.)
            
            You should try and incorporate it in the scene organically
            
            ([birthday] 
            
            A: Getting Older, John?
            B: Nah, just gettin' younger. 50 years is just the start.
            A: Mad would've called you "Tryceratops", if he found out.
            B: Yeah...miss that son..
            A: You'd think Corpo would hide such a death, but no.
            B:Why? They saw it as free adds, "Miner found dead and retrieved 1000 m. from surface with Corpo tech"? If it wasn't for such a tragedy, you'd be convinced to buy something like that, too.
            A: ...
            B: Don't think about it, just... enjoy the cake. 
            
            All in all, i found it charming. Sorry for the late response, wattpad does not send notifications to my phone anymore.
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