Hello Abby~~First of all welcome to Wattpad (a few days only). I came across you in the TeenFic Club section. I like what you're doing with "Maddy and the Melancholy Summer" You have a good narrative voice and eye for detail. I feel what your story needs to get more readers returning to it is some good old fashioned sexxual tension brewing beneath the surface.
Let's not forget your readers are 90% female age between 14-44, and hormonally curious--just like you, right? They use fiction as a secret outlet for their passions and fantasies--so let's not disappoint them. Give them what they're looking for, chapter after chapter.
As we girls know, the anticipation of sexx and romance is almost as powerful as getting it--correct? So always tease your teen and YA readers into the next chapter for more. What your story seems to lack is the inner feelings (and pulsing desires) of your characters, expressed to the reader more explicitly (but not necessarily overly graphically).
I'm sending you a short story of mine sort of similar but I think it will help you get more readers and likes. Trust me it's helped a lot of budding writers get more reads and votes on Wattpad.
https://www.wattpad.com/story/73057438-that-sultry-summer
Enjoy (And let me know what you thnik about"The Gift" at the end.
~~Calfifa
