HindElsadati

Kinda loving the new wattpad tbh

OzAshford

Hi. was reading the blue year and noticed that its no more available. so, am wondering if it will be back after the first book is fully edited

OzAshford

@AspiringHope That's great :D take your time and give us an excellent story again (Y)
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HindElsadati

@RayFO13 Heyy, I took the blue year off the site for a bit, only cuz it's been so long since I updated it so I wanna post a few chapters all at once. I'm working on it. It'll be back up soon. Thanks for reading :)
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TurtleSensei

Hey,  just finished reading Jemma.  It's a really great start to and amazing story.  I did however,  notice some spelling and grammatical errors.  Not bad ones mind you,  but they're there.  If you need help editing please feel free to let me know! I'm disabled and unemployed and a bit of a grammar nazi so I'd love to help.  Can't wait for more and I'd love to see this published one day! Also,  you did mention being unsure of the book's title being Jemma after the main character,  and I are that a different name would be more fitting.  Perhaps,  simply calling it,  "The Guests"  would be apt? It'd certainly make for an intriguing title. Also,  I do feel that you should explain more about The Guests in the beginning g of the book.  I just feel that,  if the people living in the caves were that fearful of the Guests, they would do everything that  they could to educate their children about them,  so when Jemma said she couldn't speak about then to her students I was confused.  And,  having fought them in such a lengthy war,  wouldn't they know that they could shape shift? I'd love to discuss this more with you.  Sorry if I'm being a bit nit picky.

HindElsadati

@TurtleSensei Hey! Thank you so much for writing to me and reading Jemma. Yeah, I noticed the spelling and grammatical errors too. When I first started writing the story, I used to get so excited about a chapter that I'd post it before proofreading properly. By the time I was finished, there were so many pages to edit! I try to go back as much as I can and fix stuff but it's so time-consuming and I am super busy all the time, so it's taking quite a while for me to get through everything. I thought about the title "The Guests" too but at end, I decided it was maybe a bit cheesy? Plus there's more to the story than just the Guests so it might not fit into the second book's storyline. I also thought of the titles "Gem", "The Caves", "The Descendants" and somehow ended up ruling all of those out too. I'm sure the name will change eventually, I'm just not sure to what yet. 
            
            Okay, now onto why I didn't explain much about the guests in this first book. When I was writing the teaching scene, I wanted to show how isolated the residents of those caves were. They didn’t know much about the geography of the world and they certainly didn’t know much about the Guests either. Maybe the guiders and leaders of the sustenance team did know some things but the point is, whatever information they had, they kept it to themselves and Jemma didn’t know about it. When humans lost the war, a sort of fear was installed in them. They’re now always on the defense and no longer want to fight. They want their children afraid to even mention the Guests so that when they get older, they don’t even consider the idea of leaving the caves and putting the residents at jeopardy. 
            I’d love it if you help me edit it! Thanks again. Let me know :)
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HindElsadati

So I wrote this chapter of Jemma just about 20 times before I came with this final product. Yeah, it took me forever but I hate forcing it and i was waiting for inspiration. After this, I'm hoping to update Jemma regularly. Enjoy :)