HistoricReader21

Like a deer in headlights, I was frozen still by the shine that locked my sight. From the lips she parted. To the sharp eyes she'd gaze upon me. 
          	
          	Her hair, golden and glowing in the light.
          	Her skin, A fair shade, soft to the touch.
          	Her figure, portioned perfect in both curvature and strength.
          	Her legs, provided height for a commanding presence. 
          	Her posture, A proud and regal stature, one worthy of a princess.
          	
          	Time and again she struck me with a loss of all function. And when her gaze met mine, my chest would flood with emotion. She was the embodiment of beauty. She was the commander of my heart. 
          	
          	She sat, legs crossed in the chair by the fire. A wool knit sweater keeping her comfort. And a book held in her lap to keep her company. A cup of tea on the table next to her, still steaming from the kettle. And a decanter with cups for the spirits that come after.
          	
          	A smile stretched between her cheeks upon seeing me. Attempting to melt me where I stood. I wanted to caress her cheek and feel her warmth in my hand. Pick her out of that chair and embrace her figure tight. Plant a kiss on those inviting lips till I needed a break for air.
          	
          	"Hello William" Her soft tone greeted.
          	
          	"Hello Wales"
          	
          	She was the glowing light who tamed my soul
          	
          	She was the angel on my shoulder.
          	
          	She was the girl who I treasured.

HistoricReader21

@SeaWolf100012 At the moment where I'm really struggling to continue writing my original story, I don't really think its possible to write something else right now. I already have a different story that I haven't touched in two years.
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SeaWolf100012

@HistoricReader21, can you write other Azur Lane faction
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HistoricReader21

@NA-213456 It shifts between her and Hood. But for the most part, yes, she is, lol.
          	  
          	  I don't play the game anymore. Matter of fact, I haven't touched it in a while. But when I did, I tried the hardest to acquire her.
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HistoricReader21

@TheCoolWinterHusky Her loneliness might be an idea. 
          
          I'm pretty sure in her original draft she kept a katana, unless it was something else. Maybe a pipe, I'd have to search through our old conversations. I would also assume she could speak Japanese. The RN command I don't believe would know much about her. As I wouldn't expect every ship to know everything about every other. Especially considering Thracian is not a prominent figure in the Navy. At the very least if they did hear of her backstory they may be a little indifferent. I don't really like the idea of so many having distrust or even aggressive feelings towards her. It goes against a lot of the personalities I've built in the story. So I'd prefer to keep that at a minimum.
          
          You've got an idea with her not embodying the happy-go-lucky feel. It can definitely lead to many being apprehensive to approach her. 
          
          As to why she was reactivated. I have no real answer, I never thought of it. It's something I'd have to dive into when I have the time.

TheCoolWinterHusky

Hey I know it's been awhile and you're suddenly getting back into writing but I wanted to ask if you planned to continue HMS Thracian's story. I know they're a sideline filler but I feel like their story shouldn't just end because the commander woke up. There is definitely more to explore and more to learn such as;
          
          - Her time within the Imperial Japanese Navy (Or the Imperial Sakuran Navy I completely forgot how the lore goes)
          - Her relationship with Sakurans who might've known her to some extent during her time with them
          - Her relationship with her sisters if any of them are active
          - Her loyalty to the British Empire when she's become nothing more than a second class citizen in their eyes
          - The trauma, abuse and stigmatization she's faced for her "traitor" status
          - How the Maple Monarchy deals with her especially when almost every Royal sees her as a traitor who helped train Sakuran forces
          
          I also have a couple of questions but I don't wanna bombard you with them unless you're ok with answering them. Either way I'm eager for whatever comes next, I've already come this far I may as well see it till the end.

TheCoolWinterHusky

@HistoricReader21 It would be a good way to reflect her veterancy and trauma. My guess is that Thracian still hasn't gotten over what happened even after all these years and she's only been staying silent about it since nobody would truly understand her and she hates it when her loyalty is questioned.
            
            A katana would look good on her and definitely be more presentable than a pipe. It symbolizes her time with the Sakurans and she could always claim it's a war trophy to avoid raising eyebrows. For small aesthetic details her katana could have Chinese traditional characters (Hong Kong uses traditional characters) engraved into the steel to symbolize remembering the defenders of Hong Kong.
            
            I feel like her battle group already avoids speaking to her since she's always moody and introverted. Just my two cents.
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TheCoolWinterHusky

@HistoricReader21 I would say maybe dive into her loneliness after everything she's been through for the parts of her you can't remember. She doesn't exactly give off the feeling of embodying Azur Lane's "happy-go-lucky" attitude when she's practically isolated with nobody to turn to for help or to vent about her trauma. Opening her stigmatization a bit more for being a "traitor" in the eyes of a handful of Royals would definitely be a good decision in my opinion since from what I've read Thracian's story reflects more of a darker side of AL's universe as nothing truly is perfect.
            
            The Sakurans I don't have much to say about them since you don't plan to incorporate them too much in this book but if you did it could work as a filler or hint for Ontario and Haida about her past.
            
            As for my question:
            
            - Does she carry souvenirs of her time within the IJN amongst her personal belongings (Kimono, old uniform, old photos, souvenirs in general, etc)
            - How does the Royal Navy's command treat her. Specifically figures like Queen Elizabeth and Warspite if they even know of her existence
            - Why was she reactivated if she's an irrelevant destroyer from the Great War, was she one of the initial experiments? (I forgot but I'm pretty sure you said she was)
            - She probably does but for the sake of confirming, does she speak Japanese?
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HistoricReader21

@TheCoolWinterHusky I really don't know. I had a few ideas planned with her, even one that was supposed to come up within the next few chapters, but like you said, she's a side character. And I can't really let her lore take up most of my thoughts when I'm trying to plot out the story. 
            
            Not only that. But it's been so long that I've got to basically replot the story and timeline I had set out since I forgot most of it. Basically, I've got to reorganize and remember my original plan. Meaning I've had to cut out and rethink some points.
            
            The trauma aspect I didn't want to go too in depth with. And her being a 'traitor' is hard to incorporate when the ships in the games story are generally very accepting and happy-go-lucky. Not to mention the characters in my story were already written out and introduced with the same personalitys. It makes it a little hard to make them being mean to another convincing. Though I can stretch it a little with a small handfull of royal ships, like in her introduction chapter. It's a topic I have to be careful with and use strategically or could just poke a number of holes in the story already written. (Something I'm already having trouble remembering)
            
            Her relationship to the sakurans would be sparse too, apart from maybe a few interactions. The sakurans themselves I didn't plan on writing too much about in this part of the story to begin with, though maybe there's a few ways I could. I'll have to think.
            
            In all, I've had to tone back how much I incorporate her if I want to continue this story and keep it on track. I can't distract myself, or I'll just get frustrated and lose interest again.
            
            Not to mention work in real life. Especially when winter kicks off, I'll be extra busy and too exhausted to think straight, let alone write if I do manage to think of a few ideas. 
            
            Maybe with time, I could find more ways to incorporate her. But right now, I have to focus on the main story.
            
            What other questions did you have?
            
            
            
            
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HistoricReader21

Like a deer in headlights, I was frozen still by the shine that locked my sight. From the lips she parted. To the sharp eyes she'd gaze upon me. 
          
          Her hair, golden and glowing in the light.
          Her skin, A fair shade, soft to the touch.
          Her figure, portioned perfect in both curvature and strength.
          Her legs, provided height for a commanding presence. 
          Her posture, A proud and regal stature, one worthy of a princess.
          
          Time and again she struck me with a loss of all function. And when her gaze met mine, my chest would flood with emotion. She was the embodiment of beauty. She was the commander of my heart. 
          
          She sat, legs crossed in the chair by the fire. A wool knit sweater keeping her comfort. And a book held in her lap to keep her company. A cup of tea on the table next to her, still steaming from the kettle. And a decanter with cups for the spirits that come after.
          
          A smile stretched between her cheeks upon seeing me. Attempting to melt me where I stood. I wanted to caress her cheek and feel her warmth in my hand. Pick her out of that chair and embrace her figure tight. Plant a kiss on those inviting lips till I needed a break for air.
          
          "Hello William" Her soft tone greeted.
          
          "Hello Wales"
          
          She was the glowing light who tamed my soul
          
          She was the angel on my shoulder.
          
          She was the girl who I treasured.

HistoricReader21

@SeaWolf100012 At the moment where I'm really struggling to continue writing my original story, I don't really think its possible to write something else right now. I already have a different story that I haven't touched in two years.
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SeaWolf100012

@HistoricReader21, can you write other Azur Lane faction
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HistoricReader21

@NA-213456 It shifts between her and Hood. But for the most part, yes, she is, lol.
            
            I don't play the game anymore. Matter of fact, I haven't touched it in a while. But when I did, I tried the hardest to acquire her.
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HistoricReader21

Over 4000 words done on the next chapter. Just needs an end and cleaning up and we should be good. When I get around to it...
          
          Its nothing too special though. Just William settling in. I have a rough draft of the chapter after this done too, so fingers crossed it's quicker.

Searcherfight

@HistoricReader21 Don't worry. Take your time. The story and us readers aren't going anywhere. We're here to support you. (•ヮ•)/
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DevotedSail09

Hello, I hope you don't mind me taking a little of your time. I know you have been, and are currently writing about the Maple Monarchy in Azur lane, and so I wanted to get your opinion on something that is causing me an awful lot of strife.
          
          I am currently working on my own Maple Monarchy centered story, but have gotten wrapped deep into a spiralling pit of alternate history. I have gone back and am rewriting all of our naval history in order to make plausible the navy I wanted in my fanfiction. I have gotten so wrapped up in it, that I've realized only now, that in doing that, I've lost almost all of our historic vessels. This wasn't something I was too concerned about, until I took another look at your first Maple Monarchy book, and someone else's story based around Canada and the Maple Monarchy. I've now begun second guessing everything that I've been doing the past several months, and left with the question I now ask your own answer for;
          
          Is it worth losing the ships that we Canadians know for mine, and just creating a whole new universe for people to try to catch on to? Or should I just return to reality, damn the feesability, and see how far I can reasonably push our historic navy?. 
          
          I don't want, nor excpect you to answer this for me, but if you wouldn't mind, I would love to hear your opinion on the matter.
          
          Thank you so much for your time,
          
           -DevotedSail09

HistoricReader21

@DevotedSail09 No problem. You dont have to be so accurate though. Contrary to what I said the world is still your oyster. You can create it so that some ports are deeper than their real life counterpart or perhaps even make it so the government dug it out to deepen it for that soul purpose. 
            
            You just need enough for people to feel the connection. Smaller things like that, they won't pay much mind to. Those are the kinds of things you can tweak. 
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DevotedSail09

@HistoricReader21 At the time of writing my previous message to you, I was already toying with and considering the idea of changing the alternate history to better fit the actual timeline and accommodate historical vessels. Your response put a very apt label on how the alternate history had begun feeling while I was writing it; “foreign.” Your answer really just helps to reinforce the direction I was thinking of shifting in anyway, and for that I am truly grateful. Honestly, I'm fine with starting the alt history over again anyway, it’s not like it’s the first time. Plus, I enjoy doing this stuff. I wouldn’t have spent two and a half hours with a friend looking over all of Vancouver Island on different maps for a place deep enough to house a battleship fleet if I didn’t enjoy doing it. (that place was Port Hardy by the way) So again, I really must thank you for giving a second opinion with which to conquer my indecision.
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HistoricReader21

@DevotedSail09 You can still create a new universe, and alter much of history. But if you want to truly represent a real-life counterpart, it's best to leave just enough untouched for people to make that connection, and feel like they're truly reading something about that specific topic.
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HistoricReader21

So a quick update, as your probably wondering what's taking so long and why there's been a bit of a pause in my regular releases.
          
          To put it straight forward. The words just aren't coming out. And I'm lacking the emotion needed in the chapter, right now its rather rushed and bland at the moment.
          
          Another thing is how I've been writing. Normally, all this time I've been writing on a laptop, laying on my bed. Now for the longest time this was the most comfortable way, but now that I'm getting a bit older, and (crazily despite only being in my 20s) my posture is beginning to absolutely kill me, and laying on the bed the way I do when I write just makes it worse . Because of that, obviously, I can't really write, as im far too uncomfortable.
          
          So I've ordered a desk along with a chair and we'll see how that goes, I'm sure it will be better. But that means I'm not going to waste time (no offence) writing while I wait for it, when I could use that time to do other things.
          
          Speaking of other things, life has also become distracting as of late and I've had to put a little focus on that. Easily understandable.
          
          Any time I do try to write, I'll only get an average of 300 words. To make it worse, they are very straightforward words, very bland, and lack personality in the P.O.Vs narration. 
          
          Still. . . It is pretty much finished now. But it needs to be seriously fixed. As for when I'll get it out, there is no time frame. Could be next week, could be the week after. Preferably NOT next month. But I won't promise, sorry. 
          
          To put even simpler. I've just been far too distracted lately by a multitude of different factors and, along with a small lack in interest, it has been preventing me from writing most days of each passing week. 
          
          It shouldn't be too much longer before it's out so don't worry too much. As for if the quality will be to what you expect, hopefully it's close and I don't get frustrated and release it with little editing. 
          
          Take care, talk to you soon.

TheCoolWinterHusky

@HistoricReader21 I wanna see Thracian beat an Aircraft Carrier in a 1v1 :D
            
            In all seriousness just take your time good writing never comes quickly, just like Madness Combat animations!
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HistoricReader21

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Holy shit, what a game. We're still in it!

NA-213456

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@HistoricReader21 Yeah, the shit talking on the radio before the game at game 5 and then the massive cheer for them to go at it in 6, God I was on the edge of my seat when it was all going down.
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HistoricReader21

That was a good save Sammy.

HistoricReader21

@HistoricReader21 It was more or less a regular game. But Samsonov played really well despite his latest injury.
            
            Matthew's got his 60th goal of the season and there was a large fight towards the end with Buffalo.
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NA-213456

@HistoricReader21 did something happen? I haven't been keeping up with the hockey world lately.
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