-Miss-Rong-Wright-

Hey! Would you like to read my book Secrets, please? My first language is not English and I want to make sure that I translated my story correctly! Thanks!

-Miss-Rong-Wright-

@Hollie0123 thank you very much for pointing out my mistakes, I will try to correct them! 
            Also, I am happy that you like my story!
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Hollie0123

@RongWright It was really good. The only thing was acasionally you would put in a extra small word like to, the, as ect. Also when you first introduced flavio and you said flavios dark eyes, my driver of 2 years,  sparked at me. Or something like that. In english you would say flavio my driver of 2 year's dark eyes sparkled at me. That way you dont break halfway through the sentence if you get what I mean. But its a awesome effort especially if english is your second language cause English is a horrible language to try and speak. I really like the story and hope you continue writing it. 
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