Hopeful ghost

@Izzicle Nah, it's fine! I love it!
            Just giving some constructive criticism, to help improve it. I personally feel this book could be really successful!

@Izzicle sorry I don't write stories much

@Izzicle It's really good, really interesting.
            However, it would benefit from the use of more paragraphs, as sometimes it's a little difficult to read without.
            But storyline wise, brilliant!

Also what do you think?

@Izzicle thanks

@Izzicle cool, I'll take a look!