@HorrorHound
I get so excited when I have a new chapter that I forget to go back and fix all of those mistakes. I still have to edit it so yeah I understand you. I get so into the plot line that I don't really pay attention to grammar stuff and all. But thank you for reading and being honest!!! :)
@Jessvk I like it but I got so confused throughout the the story. Especially when I didn't know who was talking and it needs a little more detail and it seamed like it was cutting from scene to scene. It doesn't seem to flow very well at times. Otherwise i liked it. I can't wait for you to add more. I wrote this in the comment section thing but then I thought you may not check that so I put it here.